Me v The Moon

Nestled upon a pillow of cloud

The moon sat, big and fat

As I watched it from my garden

In a cul-de-sac


It didn't really do much

Just illuminate the sky

But, then I thought: that alone

Makes it a greater thing than I ! 



◄ Starlight

A Winter Escape ►


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trevor homer

Sun 20th Dec 2020 15:22

The final verse tells me a great deal about both the poem and its author - I like the cosmic nature of this piece. Thanks

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Stephen Atkinson

Thu 3rd Dec 2020 22:47

Thanks for the comment & Like Shifa. Appreciated as always

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Shifa Maqba

Wed 2nd Dec 2020 16:52

So concise yet so effective! Your poem shines brighter than the moon itself. Amazing!

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Stephen Atkinson

Wed 2nd Dec 2020 11:33

Thank you for the kind additional comments Julie & Keith, & thank you to everyone for all the Likes! ♥️

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keith jeffries

Wed 2nd Dec 2020 07:01

We are but miniscule.
Good poem

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julie callaghan

Tue 1st Dec 2020 20:08

The moon had certainly been impressive this last few nights. Nice write.

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Stephen Atkinson

Tue 1st Dec 2020 20:01

Thank you Aviva for your wonderful words of wisdom
I'm over the moon
You say I'm greater than the moon
Alas, my dear wife says
I'm as much use
as a chocolate spoon! 🥺

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Aviva Rifka Bhandari

Tue 1st Dec 2020 13:45

You v The Moon

Illuminating the sky, judged alone,
may make the moon greater than you are.
And then there's the matter of size itself
Contrary to appearances
The moon is certain to be larger too.
But greatness must be measured
In multiple directions
Never just one or two.

So then I thought to put this thesis
To a proper test, devise some new measures
An art contest, perhaps.
And you must surely draw the moon better
than it could ever draw you.
I can think of many other challenges
That you could excel at,
Whilst the moon couldn't manage.

You are better at poetry too
And so, you are greater than the moon.

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