Beautiful and moving. Take care, Tony.

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that third stanza holds so many opportunities of where you could go with metaphors etc. Its been a while I've stopped by mate.

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great poem.

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That's a really great poem. Very compelling.

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This is a tough subject matter to write about or read Andy. In fact, I think that every poet who's willing should try at some point to put into words the horror of what happened in those camps though - just so that we never repeat the same mistakes. Having read back what I just wrote, I realise how foolish it sounds. The same mistakes have been made and probably will continue to be made in the future. How sad is that?
What imbued the Natzi experience with such horror was the disciplined, organised, methodical way they went about it. The utilisation of humans as instuments to strip down and process. It is really hard to take on board that level of organised evil.

I commend you for writing about it.

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Hi Andy,

Your comments and insight on my last were much appreciated.

I think you picked an even tougher one here. The "piles" repetition is very effective. A hard write - and a hard read.

Regards,
A.E.

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Andy: marvellous! - truly one of your best........Dorinda.

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very moving and thought provoking were know your talernted that goes with out saying need I say more x

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Painfully good poem. Thanks for that.

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Oh Andy, this is beautiful. I love the phrase "Alice trapped", it conjures up the feeling and the mood of the content beautifully. Your structure is a lot more clearer nowadays and I love your line endings, 'Messiah, shadows, crowd and ghetto'. I particularly like the word 'smudged' in the context of this poem, as it seems quite chilling. Beautiful. I look forward to hearing you read this out loud. xx

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cheers guys..

G - i must admit i am particularly happy with the change mid pace in the piece - its almost like a change in gears and is something i am proud of in particular.

Jeff - cheers also - it's not a hard easy piece to read and i am proud of the way it came out.. as i know i have said already - it wasn't a easy piece to write but am very proud off it..

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Great writing Andy, real, hard hitting, difficult to capture true suffering in words but you've done a good job here. I've put together some chords which I hope you think capture the mood you want to create.

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beautiful (if this is the right word) stuff. the change in pace halfway through the piece is stunning..

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