Perfect Place.

Like this, Andy. I particularly like -

'I want to listen
To the cars parking
In the distance.'

It's an odd image, but a really engaging one. I think this might be my favourite poem of yours. It feels very focused.

Good one, Andy.

Steve

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Hi Winston,

thank you for your comment on my profile - it means a lot to know that you sense the strata : )

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thank you for the tip andy
i like your poems they make
you think and see whats happening
they are really great cnt wait to read more
from you - Hollie

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David

Thank you for your comment. It is suppose to have that feel to it but I do not always succeed in getting the stressed/unstressed syllables to meet the iambic rules that my english teacher told me to disregard! Other than that it is a narrrative poem that has a thought to be heard. You should read the 'hoodie' poem, it has a little more rhythm to it.

Regards
Sam

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Hi Steve
great stuff last night. Interesting as ever that when performed the poems mean more / different things. For example for the first time your poem, Hearthside and its repetitive ending made sense. Speak to me AS the oak tree hollows. I see now (lazy reader I guess) Winston

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What are you insinuating sir?
Cx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

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Hi Winston
I've tried to explain further the "recursion" poem thing - have a look and maybe we'll discuss tonight
P

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

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Cheers Janet, thanks for commenting! If ever you're in York on the second Wednesday of the month, come along and check out the Speakers' Corner (web link above).

Comment is about Andy Humphrey (poet profile)

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Are you suggesting I have little imagination? - it's one recording - you might sound like Terry Thomas in real life! and anyway I like my Dylan's! and furthermore what in hell's name are you complaining about? .... you've never even remarked upon, let alone complimented my voice!
:-)
Cx

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Love the killer heels by the way. How do you walk in them? - I can't .... I always look as if I've lost my horse.
Cx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

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Hello Alison, thank you for your lovely kind comments. I have wanted to get in touch with you before now but I have had Uni deadlines I onlyl just completed, my head felt like it was going to explode. It's so nice to be able to return here and read all the poems. I love your last blog poem but I want to give it the time it deserves and read it again. Should be able to now, for a while at least..I hope 2009 brings you all you desire..Best Wishes, Deb

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loved reading these poems.
liked "I trace the wood as if I could find
the whorl of his fingerprints
somewhere in the grain" especially, wonderful choice of words. winston

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Winston!
Thank you for the awesome comment. Yes yes I am twenty-one, which is constantly a surprise to me and occasionally others (in every sense except one-to-one meeting peoples!).
I really enjoyed your stuff too :) nice images going on there!
Thanks again :)

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

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Tried to 'chat' again, but couldn't make it work - story of my life.
Cx

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glad you like my stories and dramas !

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Cheers for the comments over Perfect Place and Windowscreens.. I like to leave things a bit vague on my poetry sometimes on purpose, and in some cases like Windowscreens I like to do character pieces (My brother is not like that!) lol

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Hi Andy
Thanks for your obs on 3 Stones
Gus

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Hi Andy RE - Pictures on Window Screens. This poem says what I have been thinking on and off for a long time but with a difference. I often wonder at thi little things in life. the ants, the tiny flowers, the lichens. get close and they are amamzing (sorry , gettling all sloppy here) then bosh a dirty great big boot destroys all that perfection in an instant without a care and without insight. In your poem the difference is the beauty is also man made as well as the destruction (the wiping away) It captures that b..b..b..but instant before thewipe nicely as that info is only contained in the last two lines.
Another point - Isn't a window screen a mesh screen that keeps out flies and a windscreen the glass in a car? might want to consider this or tell me I have it all wrong. Winston

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Hi Andy

thank you for taking the time to read my poem Nothing to Say

i have changed a couple of words since i wrote it and feel that the piece now has a more balanced and complete feel about it

thanks again

steve

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Happy new year Andy,
thanks for your recent comment on my poem,
"Nobody ever visits any more."
Janet.x

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Happy new year Winston,
thanks for your comment on my poem "Nobody ever visits any more."
You picked up precisely on the image i wished to portray.
Janet.x

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

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thank you for being supportive and I hope we get a chance to meet soon - look forward to seeing the article once it's all up and running.

Also, it is good tomeet someone who believes in reading and education in relation to our own development of writing!

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near heaton park train station?

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

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Whereabouts? I used to live near St. Mary's church.

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

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Thank-you for your appreciation of my lumpy culinary effort!
And Happy New Year :-)
Cx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

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Wow I love the valentine one it's wonderful!

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Hi Gemma
Read your Blackpool Rock poem today. Great stuff. I also have a seedy side of blackpool poem on my Myspace prompted by taking my 8yr old daughter there recently (had to use selective hand blinkers!). Can I tell you what really amazes me however... And that is the fact that twice now I have seen you scribbling words shortly before reading! how does that work? Take it from me that everyone was shocked to silence at the Bolton performance course when they found out you had just written the "star fish - bed" poem you performed so well. (sorry can't remember the actual title) Cracking stuff,
winston

Comment is about Gemma Lees (poet profile)

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Re technicolour - it's a heavenly light I'm bathed in! - lol ..... nobody else noticed.
Cx

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

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Thanks Andy
Hope 2009 is a good one for you

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Thank-you!
Cx

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Hi Son I think you are an old soul someone who has been here before x Your poetry is amazing and I can empathise with the things you write, judging by your thought you are Humanistic working from your own phenomological feild love you always xx as I have always said you will go far in this life xx

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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That's the trouuble with anarchic males, Nabila, they just won't listen to the teacher! A cad versus C. A. D.? No contest. (:o)

Comment is about Barrie Singleton (poet profile)

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Well why don't you read Friday Roast again with this in mind:

Carol Ann Duffy has described my work as an iron hand in a velvet glove............

if you still can't get it - I shall explain

Comment is about Barrie Singleton (poet profile)

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Judging by much of the poetry out there, the words 'publishable' and 'standard' (in the modern sense of 'having worth') no longer apply in the poetry sphere. The Emperor is still naked, and has opened a poetry school . . . Even published poets, in hard covers (some long dead) wrote a lot of bad poetry - if you dare to read it objectively. I'ts all in the name; but now you don't even need that! Anyway - your approval much appreciated. Thanks.

Comment is about Barrie Singleton (poet profile)

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Hi. I think your writing is of a publishable standard and I cannot fault it !

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thanks !

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

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oops! a P.S.
If you're writing YOUR story, whether 100% autobiographical or embellished, remember that to everyone else it is just a story. We are all the most fascinating people in our own lives, doesn't always follow that we are fascinating people - the more autobiographical your writing is, the more difficult it can be to keep some onjectivity!
Cx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

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Some advice I was given years ago - may or may not come in useful ...
- Do a re-write, strip away every single adjective so you are left with just the skeleton, put back only those that make a difference to what you want to say.
- If you are really, really, really impressed with what you've written - put it in the bin.
- Prefer the anglo-saxon.
Would always be delighted to take a look at anything you've written.
You know the Clough? - whereabouts are you?
Cx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

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Fantastic poems mate - really good to see someone writing from a queer movement perspective. Keep it up!

Comment is about Dominic Berry (poet profile)

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Thanks for reading Andy... nothing that mush different ... but what do I know..... get another drink into ya....
see ya soon
Gus

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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thanks for taking the time to read my work it means a lot and I welcome criticism - well to be honest it's for both and with each poem I adopt a different tone - relevant to the subject to bring it to life.

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very pleased to make your virtual Acquaintance Abi

steve : )

Comment is about Abi (poet profile)

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Sorry about spoiling your illusions about reading snowmen .... guess tonight is not the best night to tell you about Father Christmas then?
Hope you have a good 'un too.
Cx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

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Happy Christmas to you too.
Cx

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Actually, I do have a poem about snowmen flying, but that's not the Christmas one for 2008! I'll post it later! Have a great xmas, m8..

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

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Hi Andy. In your poem Prefect Place, liked your section -
I want to listen
To the cars parking
In the distance.
for some reason has a lovely vagueness for me
Winston

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Thanks A.E. for your comments about Susto. I think we should adopt the word, I agree about the stength and meaning it carries. Unfortunately soul - loss is not commonly recognised as cause of....anything much in our culture..I read of it through Elena Avila. Best wishes, Deb

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

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Thanks for commenting on 'sanderling'

About sounds - if the sounds and rhythms are already in the language, do you need anything else?

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

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Only read of few of your poems but am Impressed so far, 'my space' and 'testament' really flick the poetic switch for me anyway.

looking forward to reading more stuff.

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

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Hi Val.
Thanks for stopping by to comment on "testament." I have yet to perform this - but I guess I will need quite a lot of practice first as it's full of the kind of words and phrases that easily trip the reader up. I'm working on posting the audio file, but struggling as this is a first for me.
I have been strolling through your samples, and very much admire your environmental pieces. If poetry can be used as a tool to make people sit up and take notice, then so much the better. Keep them coming!
Regards, A.E. X

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