Rain in England ?. Cate whatever are you thinking.

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Oh joy! Thanks for comment on mine Cate! I would not have found 'Eer Olive's Pumps without!!

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Hi Cate
There are one or two on the list that may be do-able.
Prizes for the best suggestion.

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Hi Ros - I've found 5 mins to update that heart poem on discussion. Would you mind inserting my stanza before yours? I think your stanza kind of finishes it off - perhaps we should get everyone else who adds to insert also.
Hopefully see you soon. Isobel x

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Thank You Ros ...What a wonderful thing to say and suffer from.... yes poor boy....phew!!!

Gusxxx

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Thanks Nicky - I read all your stuff..it's so tender...
Steve Smith

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Thanks, I wrote it last night. My daughter asked me to write about Autumn and also the moon (which I have done but not too sure about it at the moment). I like your work some of it could be used in one of the brilliant dark comics such as Watchmen or Dark Knight if you get my drift ' it seems you have just killed the jester' - "you have the right of freedom
If you have enough money." Nice and dark, ready for a fight.

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Hi Kealan
Thanks for the comment, thought and idea.
God knows what it would do to my creaking frame. The drugs may help of course.

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Hi Cynthia - thanks for comment on mine. Your 'Thinking' could be aimed at me - Kipling said not to 'make thought your aim' but what did he know! I often call us the "ape confused by language" but then language also cures. What if we had none, and all thought like pre-verbal infants - or in pictures?

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Thanks for kind comments on mine Tommy. your nose job abstruse to the power of 'n' where 'n' is infinite. I am still at 'c'.

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Hi john, I hope you did not take offence at my response to your 'philistine' comment, last night. I had understood by your many contributions to the discussion threads that you could handle a little criticism about what you had said ( and not your poetry, as the management of the site has taken this to mean ) if I caused offence I apologise, but it was purely in defence of other users of the site that I thought your comment would offend. However, I have been reprimanded by the management for my straight talking and free speach, oh and for my language - funny, where did I get that word from? lol.

Good luck and take care.

nicky :-)

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Hi John,

thanks for taking the time to read and make comment on my work

steve x

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as always - thanks for taking the time to read and make comment on my work Cynthia

mucho ta

steve x

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do i get to bring a freind? (its a dead squirell wrapped in a bread blanket, i keep it to remind me of better days.)

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Tommy x

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Kealan concidered yourself hired...start this Friday 8pm (party time) dress: rough & hard.

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no problem. must admit i enjoy ur work,

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thanks man, yea im gonna have to get on top of that eventually.

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Thank you K for your comments both!

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Thank you Tommy for your really thoughtful and thoughtprovoking comment on 'Single Malt Tears'. You hit the nail on the head, some of us cannot find the balance and succumb to whatever 'oblivion' is available, others of us fight to find the balance that makes things bearable.

nicky x

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Thanx for your comment on my poem, mucho appreciated.

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Hi Nicky,
Thank-you for reading and commenting on 'Growing Up' and 'One Touch of Nature' - glad you liked them.
I'm not sure I can offer any advice about going up tempo - I write in a very haphazard way, and the more I try and force things - the less I seem to be able to set down on paper. Just keep writing, is the only thing I'd advise anyone.
Cx

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Neil
Perhaps a bodice-ripper next.
I just had the feeling this a.m. that there can only be so many ways that we can describe a love lost. So!
Poets must suffer!!
Thanks for the ;-)

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Hi Cynthia, thank you for taking the time to read my poem. I thought your comment was a very interesting one that made me go back and read it again quite carefully, I hadn't thought about there being different tones to the voice but I see what you mean. I was also pleased to be introduced to your work, especially The Sage, very haunting. I enjoyed the language too (I'm sometimes accused of using 'old fashioned' language).

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Thank you for sharing 'Lies' with me Neil. A very true and thoughtprovoking poem. Funny how we try automatically to protect our young ones with lies in one form or another, when what we should be doing is preparing them for their solo entrance into the world. The difficulty is finding the balance.

Nicky x

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Hi Kealan, good to meet you, thought your poem Fires of Burning Midnight worked well with the musical accompaniment, like the poem too, hope to see you again soon, and making your debut on the stage! cheers Jeff

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Haha. Take it your house is the same as mine then!!! Chaotic, except between the hours of 9pm and early hours of the morning?! Nice to hear from you Neil.

Nicky x

ps. what do you think of my arty-farty pic?lol:-)

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Hi Nicky, sorry I have been quiet lately but I've been busy with work after idling the summer away, I only get a small window of opportunity to stealth surf WOL at the mo!

Thank you for your thoughtful comments. I would like to share one of my favourite poems that I first read as a teenager and I think it was the first poem that made me stop and think. It is by Yevtushenko. I suppose, consciously or otherwise, it has influenced my own ideas to some extent.

Lies

Lying to the young is wrong.
Proving to them that lies are true is wrong.
Telling them
that God’s in his heaven
and all’s well with the world
is wrong.
They know what you mean.
They are people too.
Tell them the difficulties
can’t be counted,
and let them see
not only
what will be
but see
with clarity
these present times.
Say obstacles exist they must encounter,
sorrow comes,
hardship happens.
The hell with it.
Who never knew
the price of happiness
will not be happy.
Forgive no error
you recognize,
it will repeat itself,
a hundredfold
and afterward
our pupils
will not forgive in us
what we forgave.

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Thanks for your comment on my little poem that's over 40 years old.

You must gird your loins and read your stuff at the next open mic. There's one at the Howcroft on Sunday!

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haha! LOVED a summary of T. Hughes' poetry! great stuff! And thanks for your comment, really made me laugh! xx

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Thank you for your comment Cynthia.
I find it such an irony that Bamburgh Castle was 'restored' using money gained from arms sales, and that there is a war memorial below the castle.

I think it is a measure of how low we have sunk as a society, when a major British arms dealer is running schools all over Britain under the cover of being a 'registered charity'.

So much for the chances of our children living in peace !

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Hi Tommy

Thanks 4 listening...me cummin at u...

Gus

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Windows is great, I have a few in a similar vein or would that be pane.
Anyway it's sharp and funny. I like it.

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John, as near as I can figure, the definition of what is poetry is now very broad, and your work so far posted certainly qualifies. You definitely have 'the feel'.

I do think attention to the entire background of poetic skills is essential, the same points which came up in your GCSE courses: a wide vocabulary for selective diction, the varied methods for acquiring vivid imagery and of sound, the colours of mood, and the overall effect of tone. If you don't know where you're going with a poem - stop. Or, if you digress - stop - and go back and find your direction again. Perhaps you need another poem, or six. Don't waffle. It's not fair to your reader.

If you don't know what I'm talking about, look it up. It's really important if you are really sincere.

Alvin's comment is excellent: it follows through with what I think is your intent: exclusivity.

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Thank you for the encouragement!

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Hi cynthia, thank you for the comments.
I see what you mean about science and poetry both being about discovery, unfortunately the science side of thing has lost any sense of discovery at the moment due to the dreaded exams causing me to have to keep dredging up and trying to memorise the same old facts!
I really appreciate how you dont just give me a little comment of encouragement, but provide constructive criticism i can work on.
Jessie.

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Hi Gus
good job on the stalker poem. Ihave mininised it further. Perarse to far! interesting exercise. Win x

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True a message to the untouchables , but,but, ,,, they won't read it because it doesn't affect them. They don't have a problem it is purely recreational. What a load of pants!.

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Thank you , you are very kind.

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I say, Cynthia you keep me on my toes don't you. My daughter asked for the piece ,it was lightweight I agree. If you want some real meat then I will have to oblige some time in the future.
Your comments are appreciated it keeps me on my toes.

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Hey John , thanks for the comments and yes St Peppers is a classic album which is well locked into the jukebox of historical recordings. A Day In Life !!!!.

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Hi Tommy

thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem

steve x

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Hi Andy

thanks for taking the time to read and make comment on 'occupation'

steve x

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thanks for your comments on rowan tree Winston , sorry i have missed the juggling :)

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Cate
Thanks for the comments on my "70 Metres Dash". It really was true - I did keep comimg last. ("The Charge of the Light Brigade" is true as well - don't ever get electricians in your house to do some work!
Since you commented I took the opportunity to look at your stuff, ("Eer Olive's Pumps"). We seem to have a similarity of style - heavy meter and rhyme, light content.
Post some more.
John Coopey

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Hi Cynthia
Thanks for taking the time to comment.
I went to SA, as a 19 year old idiot, in 1967. I knew nothing of the world (who did in '67). I'd been as far as the Isle of Man, and never seen London until the plane took off from Heathrow.
Met my wife in SA (half Dutch; half Scot), and the children were born there. It was probably only when they came along that the light started to dawn. Returned at the beginning of '75 somewhat wiser.

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Hi Cate
Thanks for the comment. I was in my 'rebel' years when I went to SA, but knew nothing of the ways of the world. The only things that bothered me were pop music, football and the odd? girlfriend. I know, now, that I knew nothing of apartheid. It was an illuminating period of my life.
A lot of the black South Africans had Biblical names. I think they were more Christian than the rest of the inhabitants.

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Hi John
Good to meet you at Hebden, and thanks for taking the time to comment.
I try to at least acknowledge the wrongs that I have been complicit in. I wish I had the guts to do more.
I was 19 when I went to SA, which I think is equivalent to a mental age of about 12 in todays children.

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Tee hee. Yes - that's one way of suffering big time...

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yes , to your comments about a fishmonger , cold dead things , slabs , all those ideas instantly in your mind

i am fine , taking lunch break at uni :)

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