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In the shadow of silence.

 

A suede tongue flicks a gripping pill,

a yo yo machine for the tides of an acid school,

and marks the seconds like a list,

memories are ploughed and never forgive.

Blinks are berserk and dry.

 

Vitruvian -

Cobra coiled wrists punch

circus pulses, automated, and wait

for a whisper. Born mad, the hope

is fatigue, knowing the senses

are as sharp and as clear as glass

 

but not as still. 4 am – neither

here nor there, noise is paramount

and unfair,

the will drips relentless

and burns the eyeball

 

a little too loudly. Somewhere,

beyond the window sill,

people sleep in peace,

not tall enough to reach over,

here, the shadows stain the face.

 

 

◄ Mr Piano

Picking up a broken mirror... ►

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 14th Apr 2010 15:15

I too like this a lot, for all the reasons given by Ray Miller. Plus the internal alliteration is superb. You don't seem to have any problem with being constantly 'different'.

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Andy N

Tue 13th Apr 2010 13:35

great bits in this piece, suede tongue and shadows stain the face my favourites.. enjoyed this1

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Ray Miller

Mon 12th Apr 2010 15:58

Liked this, beautiful language and fine rhythm. Lot of poems start off well, then fade, but this gets better."noise is paramount and unfair" "people sleep in peace, not tall enough to reach over" great lines.Do you need "yo yo"? tides is saying the same thing and the rhythm is better without, also, I think "fatigue is the hope" would sound better. But fine writing.

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