Burn

I’m not a pyromaniac, but my emotions are like a fire.
Not dealing with past trauma because I don’t have what that would require.
So when I find myself alone and fighting the darkness in my head,
I end up saying so many things I wish were never said.

And as I look around at all the bridges that I’ve burned,
I know that by now, I really should have learned.
And as the smoke clears and my lash-outs subside,
I find myself alone again just wishing I would die.

When my emotions take control of me, my friends aren’t the only ones I harm,
I take the tip of my lighter and I burn a “U” right into my arm.
At first it feels Euphoric, like I’m burning away my distress,
But the scars that it leaves behind constantly remind me that I’m a mess.

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Gunnar Payn

Sun 29th Sep 2019 15:03

Thank you for the feedback everyone, Brian, I think you're absolutely right about those lines.

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 29th Sep 2019 14:51

Brian has a fair comment to make about "strict" (or not) rhyme. His
own lines seem well constructed in the context of the poem. I enjoyed the repeat of "ish" in the chosen words to maintain the theme and the rhythm.

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Brian Maryon

Sat 28th Sep 2019 23:30

I personally don't have an issue with with the said rhyme, but if a strict rhyme is needed what about...

And as the smoke clears and my lash-outs diminish
I find myself alone again and wish my life would finish

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Don Matthews

Sat 28th Sep 2019 23:05

I cannot think of a better description of this than MC's : 'A powerful message of emotional confusion.' As a rhymer I am also jarred by subside/die but the best I can do is dry/die, still not the most satisfactory. Perhaps something needs changing with these two lines as all the others rhyme perfectly....

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 28th Sep 2019 15:57

A powerful message of emotional confusion. The use of rhythm in
the lines appeals to the songwriter in yours truly, although it sometimes goes off-balance along the way. I am a devotee of rhyme
and as such would have sought something to chime with either
subside or die, according to preference. But that's just me! Good one!

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