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Various Complications.

It begins with the singular

Then complicates.

An embryo's worst nightmare

To multiply too many

And discard a familiar friend

So one dies

 

Love be the perfect poison

For the imperfect

Only the ugly suffer true love.

 

The world is an atlas

Of invisible physics,

Equations tame confusion

For soldiers of academia

And the poor parachute

Toward calculus without wings.

 

People observe the sky

Desperate to know the universe

As an owner

But we will always be the servant,

Our greed deserves it

For we still do not understand

That knowledge is a tranquilizer

And most lack the addiction.

◄ Sarcastic at half - collapsed ridge.

The Unexpected Environmentalist. ►

Comments

<Deleted User> (7164)

Sun 31st Jan 2010 13:20

Deep and affecting.

Cynthi'a comment made me wonder and after some thought, i think it depends on ones perception of 'tranquilizers'.
I know people who swear by them for making them feel better while others think of them as dulling the senses.
I rather liked the last two lines because it's open for the reader to think further than the ending of the poem.

Well done,
Janet.x

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Andy N

Sun 31st Jan 2010 10:52

interesting stuff m8.. it's certainly one for readers to rewrite several times.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 30th Jan 2010 15:25

This has some challenging thoughts well worth pursuing. 'People observe the sky .... we will always be the servant' is really perceptive. I question two ideas: if an embryo multiplies, surely it is better if one 'part' dies. And secondly, who would want knowledge at all if it were a tranquilizer? Perhaps I misunderstand though I have tried to read carefully.

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 30th Jan 2010 12:25

Really good deep poem - loved the last two verses particularly. Really impressed!

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