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Sarcastic at half - collapsed ridge.

We walked for about an hour

Or so, talking a quarter of the way.

She brushed the blonde from her hair

In a fashion that mentioned hatred.

Not remembered hatred but a learned hatred.

However the hatred was mutual.

 

A couple for about a year

Or so, in love about a quarter of the time.

When I say love I mean

A lack of learned hatred.

 

The road merely a continuum of dusk

Silent was the sneaky mist.

It hushed and lulled, compromised

What little noise the distance made.

 

On reaching the ridge we stopped

Bits of rock peeled off the side

Like withered skin.

So many previous lovers had

Kissed and died here.

My question had followed us all the way

And now persisted for an answer as reward.

 

She brushed the blonde from her hair

In a fashion that mentioned hatred.

 

Began to speak in an ancient alphabet

That was forgotten for a reason.

And there it was.....

 

With a sarcasm that would

End a hundred wars

And begin a million.

"I would never fuck him"

Her words leaped over the edge

Before I could imagine response.

 

No more continuum of dusk.

No more questioned hours.

No more fashionable hatred.

◄ A Week In Words.

Various Complications. ►

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Andy N

Thu 21st Jan 2010 13:53

really well paced that m8... i am well impressed.. i bet it took you a while to write that (and i can relate to the content totally)

<Deleted User> (7164)

Thu 21st Jan 2010 11:23

Powerful and so full of reality in moments which seem like hours and can go on for years if left to rot and fester, all for the sake of asking the question if we dare.

I love the ending. Fabulous poem.
Janet.x

<Deleted User> (6895)

Wed 20th Jan 2010 18:31

Good evening Kealan.Am in total agreement with previous comments absolutely.Learned hatred?now where have I heard that before?Wife! pass me that photo of my Mother-in-law-lol! cheers Kealan-Stef.

<Deleted User> (7212)

Wed 20th Jan 2010 17:55

another great one Kealan

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 20th Jan 2010 11:02

This is so intense and provocative I need more time to digest it properly, but I wanted you to know right away that I think it is really good.

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