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One Night

One Night

 

Awake in my bed,
animals tucked up and warm in their shed.
The rain beating a persistent drum, soft splatters on the glass.
We wait patiently for the storm to pass.

 

The gate begins to loudly rattle,
as the elements go into battle.
Lightening illuminates the sky,
the crash of a bolt from on high.
A branch torn cruelly from it's tree.
Lashing rain making it impossible to see.

 

The claps of the applauding thunder,
as it watches on in wonder.
Wind howls and rips at every dead and living thing.
Delighted to see the devastation that it brings.

 

I lay wrapped in his arms, ears closed to the sounds,
as the rain and wind whip the ground.
Shuddering windows rattling glass.
I pray it will soon pass.

 

I sense a change.. a retreating of the combatants.
Battle lines erased. Withdrawing from the chase

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Slowly peace returns to the land,
as we remain hand in hand.
Fearful of the scene we will face,
we drift into sleeps comforting embrace.

 

© 2018 Taylor Crowshaw

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lynn hahn

Mon 20th Aug 2018 04:53

I really enjoyed the pictures you put in my head. Subject matter was wonderful.

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Hugh

Wed 15th Aug 2018 23:13

A stormy poetic performance full of rhyme.Illuminating

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Rick Varden

Wed 15th Aug 2018 14:22

I love rhyme and I really love this very descriptive piece of work. Bravo Taylor?

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Wed 15th Aug 2018 11:37

keep 'em coming, Taylor!

Ace!




Rose ?

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Don Matthews

Wed 15th Aug 2018 05:21

How good does this get Taylor?

The claps of the applauding thunder,
as it watches on in wonder.
Wind howls and rips at every dead and living thing.
Delighted to see the devastation that it brings. (TC)

Personifying the thunder and wind. Just so clever. So good.? And you rhymed it....

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John Coopey

Tue 14th Aug 2018 23:49

Vivid imagery redolent of Dylan's "Chimes of Freedom".

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Tue 14th Aug 2018 19:15

I particularly like the two line penultimate verse.

Big Sal

Tue 14th Aug 2018 19:06

You did an excellent job at imbuing this piece with suspense all the way through until the very last line. Top-of-the-line imagery coupled with your descriptive language on the emotions felt. Reading your work is always like watching a classic, silent film - interesting, thought provoking, and one of the best ways to pass the time without listening to music.?

Well done Taylor, again. ?

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