Percentage You

I wonder of 100,
How much of you I've seen,
I've seen your 2 or 10 percent,
As you have seen of me.

I wonder if you'll trust me,
With 10 percent more you,
Say 20 percent total,
Ill give the same to you.

I wonder if my percent me
would be safe with you,
No reassurance? Give it back!
Lets keep it back at 2.


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donovan wilson

Tue 11th Sep 2018 09:58

Thankyou for the comments guys ?

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 5th Jun 2018 17:30

I'm not sure about the contradiction that asks how much then states "2 or 10 percent" being seen. I think this
could be revised accordingly...e.g.
I wonder of 100
How much of you I see
Is it 2 or 10 percent...
The same you see of me?
Sorry, that's the songwriter in me!!
But the premise is both inventive
and entertaining.

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Don Matthews

Tue 5th Jun 2018 16:34

I liked this Donovan. Very cleverly thought out. Nice to see another rhymer on the site ?

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