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We were like ‘yin and yang’,

‘Spick and Span’

- Hot pot, big pan -

slick and tanned!

The could we can -

sweet, sweet like marzipan!

The kind of love that makes you FAT,

that attracts the sniff sniffing rats.

- Rap! Trap! Rat! The blind bats! -

But I walked and you ran,

I was kicked like tin-can

then you thought you were tin-man,

cause you forgot your heart on my sleeve

before you let the door slam.


I don’t know who I am

but this is how my mind became water,

how my thoughts became waves,

my ideas became bubbles -

they could fly away,

far away

or drop and pop -

diminish or disarray…

This is how we learned to say HEY!

Hip! Hip! hooray!

Yip! Yap! yip!

Blib! Blab! blib!


Turn that lasso round my brain

and boomerang it back again

till it’s bent like a silver spoon

because I think I’ll be needing it soon.

word playfunconfusedidentityselfrelationshiprediscoveryreinventionlost

◄ Muddle Puddle

He bleeds Autumn. ►


Big Sal

Fri 17th Aug 2018 19:14

Don't think I didn't notice all those rhymes poking through the lines.?

Cool title too. .

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kJ Walker

Fri 31st Mar 2017 18:44

Very good. Almost a rap. I agree with Laura and Graham. It needs to be performed.

Cheers Kevin

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Alexandra Parapadakis

Fri 31st Mar 2017 15:44

Thank you all so much ?

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 21st Feb 2017 16:54

Alex, I agree with Laura about the speed of this being ripe for performance. It needs a little sharpening up to read/rant more fluently but all the bits are there so to speak.
Yet another different piece from your armoury.

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Trevor Alexander

Tue 21st Feb 2017 14:00

Yes, a really insistent rhythm that almost drags you in right from the start. Love it.

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Laura Taylor

Tue 21st Feb 2017 13:34

Oh I love this. The rhythm is totally infectious, feels like skipping with words. Not sure if you do perform your poems, but this is screaming out to be performed.

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