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"IT'S BROUGHT US HERE"

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They sat across the room from each other that night; he on the settee, she in the armchair facing.

It was a night of waiting.  Their partners had been at a meeting together and were due home soon.

They had spoken of many things.  Light things.  Little things.  Friends both at ease and ill at ease.  Although they were alone there was something in that room with them which could neither be seen nor touched, but that bristled.  And they both knew it.

The talk remained safe and deliberate.

Then a conversation on the books they enjoyed reading lit a pathway between them.  After an eternity he rose to walk across towards her, then past her to the curtained window.  He ended his awkwardness and walked back to the settee.  He sat again and closed his eyes.

He heard her rise from the armchair and felt her sit softly beside him, before linking her arm through his.

After a lifetime of seconds he rested his head on her shoulder, smelling the sweetness of her hair, before they turned to look into each other’s eyes and kissed gently.

A sudden glow of an outside security light heralded the arrival of their partners on the drive.

“You know this can’t go anywhere” he said.

She fixed his gaze and brought her fingertips to his lips.  “It’s brought us here” she said.

◄ LEAVE IT IN THE GROUND

VILLANELLE FOR A SHED ►

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John Coopey

Fri 6th Jan 2017 22:30

Celia Johnson and Trevor Howard brought up to date, MC? It's a timeless scenario.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 6th Jan 2017 18:44

Did I hear Rachmaninov's 2nd piano concerto in the background...and the shrill whistle of a passing express?

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John Coopey

Fri 6th Jan 2017 15:44

Just keeping the title race honest, Harry.

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 6th Jan 2017 15:05

Uncharacteristically delicate John...you should try your hand with a novel.

I`m lightin` a candle for the Spurs tonight (but I`m snuffin` it out tomorrow)

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John Coopey

Thu 5th Jan 2017 16:08

This was a scene I dreamt, Graham. (I woke up this morning thinking I'd dreamt the result too).

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 5th Jan 2017 15:15

Coopey, you old dog! Take a tablet quick!!

2-0 2-0 lalalala!

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John Coopey

Thu 5th Jan 2017 10:12

Thanks, guys.
"Ode to a Quim", eh, Stu? I like that suggestion. It's been on the tip of my tongue for some time.
I'm really chuffed with your comment about "smouldering attraction", Paul. I was trying to create a piece for a strong woman, albeit it's written from the man's settee with an electrical undercurrent of awkward sexuality.
Thanks again, fellas.

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Paul Waring

Thu 5th Jan 2017 09:27

John, well-crafted and enjoyable to read, it unfurls so well you can almost smell the smouldering attraction! Some great lines, e.g. "lit a pathway between them", "after a lifetime of seconds" and, as Stu pointed out, the last line is so good, in fact, memorable. Thanks for this. Paul

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Jeff

Thu 5th Jan 2017 08:49

Nice twist.....jeff

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Stu Buck

Thu 5th Jan 2017 00:59

christ alive john thats rather beautiful! a lovely twist, wonderful moments throughout and the pay-off line is stirring. i fully expect an ode to the quim next and shant be disappointed.

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John Coopey

Wed 4th Jan 2017 20:29

Thankyou, Hazel. I'm going off my memory these days!

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Hazel ettridge

Wed 4th Jan 2017 20:26

And what better place could it bring us to? Just lovely.

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