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Faster than thought,

His retracting pupil checks, stirs,

The yellow eye sees, movement, caught.


Folds wings fleeting, speeds between trees,

glides, with the grace of a dancer

in a silent world.


Unqualified precision, cold.

The beauty of hunger, propelled

sleekly, through a funnel of air

brushed by light feather sweeping down,

down to the ground.


Into the chasm, small and grey

Mouse, taken, shaken and consumed,

Warm blood, now prey.


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Donna Marie Beck

Wed 12th Aug 2009 11:09

i love birds, and the line 'the beauty of hunger,propelled' is spot on.

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carol falaki

Mon 10th Aug 2009 10:17

thanks Rodney, I'll give it a go and repost it

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Rodney Wood

Sun 9th Aug 2009 12:26

Get rid of the first line, concentrate more on the "ee" sounds and make it more gory maybe to show the true horror.

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Dave Bradley

Sat 8th Aug 2009 20:57

Hi Carol

I liked this. Raptors are fascinating aren't they

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David Franks

Sat 8th Aug 2009 10:52

Well observed, Carol.

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