A flower
Caught in the muddy waters of life
Spiralling in a whirlpool of tenacity
Plucked and discarded
To continue its journey alone  

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Vicki Ayers

Mon 1st Feb 2016 23:11

Thank you both for your comments - yes Wolfie I like that - thrashing (almost like that better than spiralling!) but yes the idea being its the 'flowers' tanacity keeping it the whirlpool of its own making. I also like your suggestion Cynthia - but it has an entirely different meaning that way - somehow sadder - thanks again xx

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 1st Feb 2016 17:56

Interesting that Wolfgar makes this comment, because my first reaction was to eliminate the 'whirlpool' line entirely, leaving the 'flower' image in its 'muddy waters of life.' Just an opinion, of course, with respect.

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