A wish to help me through the night
Twin flames forever burning bright
Lost souls who've found each other now
Complete in knowledge that somehow
We'll make it through
However hard
We'll grow together
Love unbarred
Hello Vicki
to my mind this is the best thing you have written. its succinct, hopeful and a little bit lovely.
It also flows beautifully, except (my opinion only) the 'our' in the last line.
'Love unbarred' would be just as acceptable and flow better. but thats only how im reading it.
Vicki - new love? Not your usual message this one. Good luck!
Rob
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Vicki Ayers
Sun 31st Jan 2016 17:47
Stu - thank you! And yes I agree I have amended it - I'm glad you like it! And Rob alas no new love - just a wish!!