A Wish


        A wish to help me through the night
        Twin flames forever burning bright
   Lost souls who've found each other now
       Complete in knowledge that somehow
                   We'll make it through 
                        However hard
                   We'll grow together
                    Love unbarred 

◄ RIP Mr Murphy

Aftermath ►

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Vicki Ayers

Sun 31st Jan 2016 17:47

Stu - thank you! And yes I agree I have amended it - I'm glad you like it! And Rob alas no new love - just a wish!!

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Stu Buck

Sun 31st Jan 2016 13:36

Hello Vicki
to my mind this is the best thing you have written. its succinct, hopeful and a little bit lovely.
It also flows beautifully, except (my opinion only) the 'our' in the last line.
'Love unbarred' would be just as acceptable and flow better. but thats only how im reading it.

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Robert Mann

Sun 31st Jan 2016 13:18

Vicki - new love? Not your usual message this one. Good luck!
Rob

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