love and lust
The beast in me sees the beast in you
and I see what I want to do
Lust catches me unawares
I stare into your eyes and look you up and down
You are the water in which I want to drown
the flames in which I want to burn
I am like a savage caveman who wants to conquer you like Genghis Khan
But I would do you no harm
Your arms would be the charm around my neck
Your legs around my waist
I would taste your sweetness and not let you go to waste
As the animal in me sees the animal in you and vice versa
We know our connection is growing between us like lightening
Its frightening but exciting at the same time
And the intensity will eventually be two irresistible forces which will meet in middle
souls entwined
your heart and mine.
Jeff Dawson
Sat 4th Jul 2009 13:47
Hi Dan, hope you're okay mate, just catching up!
Really like this, great stuff, just a couple of observations - I would leave out the following bits I've bracketed -
As the animal in me sees the animal in you (and vice versa)
(We know) our connection is growing between us like lightening
vice versa didn't sound right, and would split the following line in two -
And the intensity will eventually be two irresistible forces/ forces which will meet in middle
up to you mate, hope that helps, great stuff though, best wishes Jeff