Kismet
Ties loosen
eyes now bound
dominance and submission
momentarily forgotten
within their
kismet kiss
© Katypoetess 2015
Ties loosen
eyes now bound
dominance and submission
momentarily forgotten
within their
kismet kiss
© Katypoetess 2015
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Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 1st Aug 2015 15:42
Brief and effective. Could be a metaphor for all types of relationships where 'dominance and submission' are emotional or mental, etc. etc.
IMO, I would separate the first line into two parts for even greater emphasis of the major shift, and thus not needing a weak comma. Just a thought.
'momentarily' is brilliant; domination and submission are hard bonds to break, however 'kismet' a 'moment' may be.