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Ties loosen

eyes now bound

dominance and submission

momentarily forgotten

within their

kismet kiss


© Katypoetess 2015

Katypoetesslovelove poetry

◄ Vampiric Chivalry

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 1st Aug 2015 15:42

Brief and effective. Could be a metaphor for all types of relationships where 'dominance and submission' are emotional or mental, etc. etc.

IMO, I would separate the first line into two parts for even greater emphasis of the major shift, and thus not needing a weak comma. Just a thought.

'momentarily' is brilliant; domination and submission are hard bonds to break, however 'kismet' a 'moment' may be.

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Nigel Astell

Thu 30th Jul 2015 15:23

I'm tongue tied.

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