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Ward 3D

Commended in the Mother's Milk Writing Prize 2015.  Judge's comments:

 

What a rare joy it is to see understatement used as it is in ‘Ward 3D’. This is also an example of ‘showing not telling’, too, and all the more powerful for that. We are never told that the child had a difficult relationship with his/her parent, that the parent is dying or that the child (now grown up) is struggling to say, ‘I love you’, but it’s all there. The ‘tiny words… ...tissue-thin and chalk for bones’ may be whispered — and the pain and fragility of difficult family relationships is beautifully conveyed.

http://evm1132.sgvps.net/~wwwmothe/index.php/easyblog/entry/results-of-the-2014-mother-s-milk-books-writing-prize

 

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 30th Aug 2014 11:59

Renown is yours. It has to be. Your rocket is flying - and deservedly so. It's the phony high-fliers who get my ass. Whatever the idiom, it isn't brains and content that launches them.

I like that this poem could be directed to anyone in your life, even yourself. Perhaps to a mother? That works most for me.

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Laura Taylor

Mon 18th Aug 2014 11:23

Thanks Andy and Isobel - appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.

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Isobel

Sat 16th Aug 2014 15:11

Compelling poetry that really speaks to me. I love this one Laura - it's raw and it's real and beautifully written.

x

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Andy N

Fri 15th Aug 2014 12:46

powerful.

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 12th Aug 2014 17:12

Laura :)x

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Laura Taylor

Tue 12th Aug 2014 09:23

Hi chaps

Many thanks for your kind comments.

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John Coopey

Mon 11th Aug 2014 18:55

Excellent, Laura. Agree with Graham about that phrase.
Can't stop hearing "The Living Yeras" in my head now!

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 11th Aug 2014 17:42

Laura, I really like this a lot. The words come at you like a whisper. Wonderful words like "all tissue thin and chalk for bones" bloody well done. A lovely piece of work.

Graham

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Tommy Carroll

Mon 11th Aug 2014 16:10

Come on Laura spill the literal beans. What are you on abt hmm? tommy x

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