Your dawn chorus

Sunday 11th August 2013 9:18 am (first posted Saturday 10th August 2013 7:14 am)

In our deliberately darkened bedroom,

the silvery slivers of this day's first light

softly kiss the contours of your face,

carefully carving out each perfect curve

like a sand-dune's crest

beneath a bright new moon.

These lines,

as bold and clear as Nevada neon,

sing out in harmony

a dawn chorus of good fortune

heard by my eyes alone.

Comments

Mon 7th Oct 2013 06:07

Thanks gents, neither gentle nor subtle in my regular modus operandi. But I'm working on it!

Mon 7th Oct 2013 02:19

I liked this, well done

Its very subtle while still being meaningful,

Good work

Fri 16th Aug 2013 23:33

Mark
nice, simple sentiment expertly crafted - liked it
Ian

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