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A day in the life of... an old coat

I’m hanging here

to remind you

of the you

you once were

(of a fashion)

and a time

you once fitted

like a glove

as you flitted

here and there

happy in the thought

that you were

going somewhere.

 

Leopard print or leather

all the buttons that you never

sewed back on

nest

in the linings of those pockets

amid the lipsticks and the tissues

the ghosts of long gone issues

paper poem vestiges

of words you laid to rest.

 

I’m hanging here

like skin on a peg

to remind you

of all that you shed

the life you outgrew

the after pain of memory

as you adapt to the new.

 

 

A day in the life of comp

◄ Sermo ut parietis

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Lynn Dye

Tue 14th May 2013 11:16

Hi Isobel, I really love this poem. It works so well on different levels, and definitely one I easily associate with. xx

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Isobel

Mon 13th May 2013 21:54

After shock would work well too. I tried to explain that expression earlier. After pain resonates more for me because it relates to childbirth - it's about pain rather than shock - after pains are like contractions - very very painful and they strike right at the core of you.

In a way, poems are like babies, you give birth to them and then you outgrow them - or maybe they outgrow you.

Thanks for reading - I appreciate it.

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Martin Peacock

Mon 13th May 2013 21:43

Hmm. An evocative and thought-provoking poem Isobel. Poems do have the unsettling habit of reminding us of our former selves don't they? Might it be better ended by changing 'after pain' to 'aftershock'?

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Yvonne Brunton

Wed 20th Mar 2013 22:24

I so Like this, especially 'all the buttons that you never sewed back on'. what a delightful allegory of life's good intentions - so often unachieved. Lovely!.

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Wed 20th Mar 2013 13:14

It wouldn't be right for me to comment, so I won't but I have read it. Nick.

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Jon

Sun 17th Mar 2013 15:03

Quite a tender piece Isobel.Sparse,but effective.
'All the buttons that you never sewed back on ,nest'
Great line.nice idea for a poem x

Cheers for comments too! The child in question is my cute granddaughter x

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Rachel Bond

Fri 15th Mar 2013 17:31

like this isobel.

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John F Keane

Fri 15th Mar 2013 16:11

That is really good. We all used to be someone else.

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Isobel

Fri 15th Mar 2013 14:07

Thanks everyone - you are all very kind. Part of the reason I don't write much any more is that I can't see the value in what I write. I think maybe I've become too good at critique and my own worst enemy :)

Yes - there are layers to this. I often find old poems I've read out at venues in my coat pockets. The words and the more outrageous clothes remind me of the time back then - it's nostalgia and sadness and wistfulness all wrapped up in one - plus the fear of growing old.

(Just in case anyone doesn't know it, after pains are what women get for a while after the birth of the second child. They are like mini contractions - a nasty dull ache)

Thanks again. x

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Greg Freeman

Fri 15th Mar 2013 12:47

There's a strong meaning in this poem, the shed skin and ghosts of issues, and it's also very well-crafted, Isobel. Worth the wait for a new one from you! Greg

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Francine

Fri 15th Mar 2013 02:18

Yes, quite wistful... and lovely in its expression with the allegory of the old coat. I love your style!
xx

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Thu 14th Mar 2013 17:50

A lovely read Izz...So wanted to get to the Tudor tonight but I am liftless! :( But I am sure I will hear this soon! x

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John Darwin

Thu 14th Mar 2013 15:07

Wistfully sad. I like wistfully sad and I like this

steve mellor

Thu 14th Mar 2013 14:58

Loved the picture (in the words)
Apart from the lipstick and the tissues, this fits me like a glove

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