In the maze
Time gets lost
in the maze
between one day
and the other,
among the skeins
of our hearts
to untangle.
Comments
Carla, this is good. Would you consider:
'among the skeins
of our tangled hearts'
The last two lines seem just a bit out of sync. Comments are always only my opinion.
tony sheridan
Wed 9th Jan 2013 19:02
Love this! Well done. Take care, Tony.
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Carla Tombacco
Mon 21st Jan 2013 21:44
Maybe you are right Cynthia, nevertheless here I prefer the infinitive at the end. Regards