In the maze

Time gets lost
in the maze
between one day
and the other,
among the skeins
of our hearts
to untangle.



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Carla Tombacco

Mon 21st Jan 2013 21:44

Maybe you are right Cynthia, nevertheless here I prefer the infinitive at the end. Regards

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 12th Jan 2013 16:55

Carla, this is good. Would you consider:

'among the skeins
of our tangled hearts'

The last two lines seem just a bit out of sync. Comments are always only my opinion.

tony sheridan

Wed 9th Jan 2013 19:02

Love this! Well done. Take care, Tony.

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