Turn Around
While you face the past
Your ass faces the future.
Turn around quickly!
©Larisa Rzhepishevska
Comments
A tight piece of writing and despite its american origins I prefer 'ass' in your haiku to 'arse' as the vowel sound is short echoing 'Past' in the previous verse ( to my northern ear anyway)
I enjoyed it. XX
Neat...and good advice too!
"The past provides the worst and best
To show us how to live the rest!"
:-)
Mmm - it's when they both face the ground that they stop being nice.
<Deleted User> (5011)
Tue 20th Nov 2012 20:31
A cheeky haiku!
Except that it's 'arse' in English, unless it's the animal, Larissa; or American.
Nice one, haiku that is, not a...
<Deleted User> (7212)
Tue 20th Nov 2012 16:12
your best so far (IMHO). B
The future will come
if December twenty two
doesn't show us a bum
Thank you Tony for giving me an idea to write another haiku.
Why do you wish to face the future?
A future that will never come,
Whichever way you turn Larisa
The past has you in its grip
And its eyes upon your bum.
What a super Haiku Larisa! It scans and it's funny and it makes a lot of sense all round :)
Looking back
Saucy bottom
Little cheeky
Forward thinking.
Larisa
Nice pithy use of the haiku...and true too.
Arse surely? I loved it too
Thank you, Tony!
tony sheridan
Sun 18th Nov 2012 19:31
Today is the first day of the rest of your life. I had a t-shirt with this on it back in the 70's. Great poem! Take care, Tony.
Thank you dear Hugh!
An excellent piece of advice.Made me smile.
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Larisa Rzhepishevska
Sun 25th Nov 2012 10:45
I would like to thank everyone here for the comments. They really inspire me to write haiku. I found it to be so interesting and exciting. With warmest wishes, Larisa