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I awoke to howling empty screams

and then I knew.

That all the children of the town

were turned to seagulls.

 

Soaring and wheeling over their old homes

where mothers are busy frying bacon.

 

They don't understand.

Where has the old school gone

where they were slow to go?

Why are cars parked up on the island

where they used to pitch their tents?

And more cars still, on Smeaton's busy pier

where they once used to dive?

 

Hungry, the children ask for food

but they are seagulls now

angrily waved away from chips and pasties,

ice creams shielded by daytrippers to the town.

 

Dappled grey and brown as tabby cats

the seagull children stand forlorn on swathes of sand.

For they do not like to eat raw fish.

 

Such a sad sound to wake up to,

as young boys voices break

into the cry of gulls.

 

 

 

 

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tony sheridan

Thu 20th Sep 2012 10:55

Love this. I sometimes stay at a caravan that my brother in law has in north Wales. The Gulls wake us every morning. We watch them feed the young Gulls that sit in the nests made in the old chimney pots on the houses over the road. Your poem took me back to the caravan.

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 7th Sep 2012 14:50


An excellent psychological`jolter` Anne,

It doesn`t really need the third stanza (which localises it a bit too much and takes some of the shivery alienation out of the rest of it.

The overall effect is rather one of terror, rather than the `sad` of the last stanza.

Forgive the quibbles (but the bloody thing is so good!)

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John Coopey

Thu 6th Sep 2012 21:25

What a fantastic idea - children turned into gulls.
At least then if you didn't feed them they'd go away.

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Greg Freeman

Wed 5th Sep 2012 07:50

Has a fantastic, nightmarish quality to it. I'm thinking John Wyndham. A great idea, Ann

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Laura Taylor

Tue 4th Sep 2012 16:38

I absolutely love the storytelling idea in here - puts me in mind of The Lost Boys. I get the feeling that you were lying in bed listening to the gulls, and did that narrative weaving that we all constantly do :)

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John Aikman

Tue 4th Sep 2012 14:09

Lovely. I tried to change a few words in my head, especially the 'stand forlorn' and 'for they do not..' which tweaked my anti-cliche, anti-archaiscism beeble boppers a bit, but in the end I decided it was...just lovely as it is.

Thank you.

: )

Jx

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