Breasts

My mistress's breasts I shall not praise,

in ways which take two centuries.

They are not pure nor white as snow,

their nipples are now dangling low.

I won't compare them to luscious peaches,

with skin so soft and free from creases.

 

After the party, your deflated balloons

have more in common than the years' full moons

with these once magnificent rising orbs.

Shrivelled silk purses where shimmering globes

once proudly pouted at odds with gravity,

we mourn their passing and alarming brevity.

 

Display them not, hide them away,

glory days where my lips once lay,

between once firm and full adornments,

now there's only the expanded absence

of love and lust and youth's fulfilment,

in empty, mottled, discoloured defilement.

 

 

 

With sincerest apologies to Shakespeare, Marvell and also Julia.  And sorry no picture ... I just couldn't!

◄ Moonshine

The blend of old and new ►

Comments

Robert Mann

Mon 30th Apr 2012 18:43

More of a leg man myself, but could always be persuaded otherwise! Some of the rhymes are a bit clunky, but the sentiments seem true and not falsies!

Profile image

Ray Miller

Mon 23rd Apr 2012 21:41

I think the first and last verses are very good. I'm less impressed with the 2nd.
I'm maybe being a bit dim but I can't quite make sense of this

After the party, your deflated balloons

have more in common than the years' full moons

with these once magnificent rising orbs.


And the gravity/ brevity rhymes seem at odds with the rest.

Profile image

Yvonne Brunton

Mon 23rd Apr 2012 08:13

great stuff what a different perpective - perhaps JC can organise a BOOB job. XX

Profile image

winston plowes

Sun 22nd Apr 2012 23:20

Hi Alison. Some nice touches in this poem which you read so clearly, quite an apt style to choose to discuss breasts which helped it roll along. Here is a link to a wonderful breast poem by Jay Bernard -
http://uk.poetryinternational.org/piw_cms/cms/cms_module/index.php?obj_id=19571

Have a read, it really is wonderful. Win X

Profile image

John Coopey

Sun 22nd Apr 2012 21:25

You shouldn't be so hard on your Mistress, Alison. If she needs a 2nd opinion perhaps I could take look at them!

Profile image

Isobel

Sun 22nd Apr 2012 09:39

Crumbs what a horrid picture you paint - I like the fun in it though.

And I'm glad to see there are some compensations for being small breasted :))

If you wish to post a comment you must login.

This site uses cookies. By continuing to browse, you are agreeing to our use of cookies.

Find out more Hide this message