Proper TV

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The second world war

appeared terrible

on the History channel.

 

Monotone across Europe

Robert Powell’s voice distressed

till the tv was switched off.

 

It really makes you question why?

Why did he leave Holby City?

at least that was in colour with dolby surround

                                         

                        y’know proper TV.

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Chris Co

Sun 29th Jan 2012 00:15

Thx Ray- I like the alternative you've mention. I think I prefer it from a sound point of view, but am less sure about the alteration of meaning.

Not much in it.

Thx for talking the time to read and comment- V much appreciated.

My Best

Chris

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Ray Miller

Fri 27th Jan 2012 20:18

Enjoyed the poem, though I really want to swap lines 4 and 5 around. Something like

Robert Powell's distressing
monotone across Europe

only better!

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