Gone...to where the light is brighter
Gone...to where the load is lighter
Gone...to where no pain can smite her
Gone to meet her Maker.
Gone...to where there are no tears
Gone...to where there are no fears
Gone...to where death disappears
Gone to meet her Maker.
Gone...but always in the mind
Gone...to leave us far behind
Gone...to where she'll surely find
A meeting with her Maker.
The pace is just perfect, 100% bang on. The content isn't really sad at all, despite it being the death of your sister (real sorry chuck) - it's really positive in fact. A fitting tribute.
My appreciation to those who kindly took the non-poetic time to offer condolences. Time is
the real salve and sufficient has elapsed to
say simply "thanks for the thought".
Lovely simplicity although it seems churlish to comment on the poetry at your time of loss. I hope its writing eases the pain in some small way.
<Deleted User> (6315)
Sun 15th Jan 2012 22:14
so sorry for your loss MC this write works well though..x
Beautifully expressed.
Works well, MC - manages to be both poignant and philosophical. Commiserations on your loss.
M.C.
As ever...clear, concise, gracefully con- cordant and (only apparently) simple.
Clears both the ears and the mind.
Thanks.
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Martin Peacock
Tue 17th Jan 2012 12:55
Coincidence or synchronicity? - that you should read 'In Her Passing' [about my dear auntie, my 'second mum'] and I find that you have written this sweet eulogy for your sister. Not being a christian I look on these departures as a return to the 'ocean of consciousness', from which we all appear as mere droplets of condensation in this particular multiverse, a comment which is NOT intended to cheapen the intensity of your loss. Think of this posting, not as sympathy, but empathy [feeling 'with', not 'for'.]