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Teardrops in my Coffee

 

Sitting in a side-street café,

Staring out at the rain.

My eyes as wet as the windows,

Mirroring my pain.

 

Plain bone china teacups,

Cutlery in steel,

Rose bud in a little vase,

Like me it isn’t real.

 

Blue and white check tablecloths,

Slate grey skies outside.

Teardrops in my coffee,

You left me with no pride.

 

Not the man I first met,

Nor the one I thought I knew.

Not the man who loved me,

But the one who left me blue.

 

Waitress clears the tables,

I guess she wants to close.

Looks at me kind of funny.

I’d best leave, I suppose….

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Lynn Dye

Fri 16th Sep 2011 13:29

Thank you so much, how lovely you all are! xxx

Philipos

Fri 16th Sep 2011 10:40

Enjoyed this Lynn and agree with all comments thus far.

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Greg Freeman

Fri 16th Sep 2011 09:24

Like the observation of detail in the second verse, Lynn, and the flatness of the final line.

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Andy N

Fri 16th Sep 2011 08:36

Enjoyed this, Lynn... Have you considered starting it from the 2nd stanza? Has a real power in it either way.. cheers - andy n x

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 16th Sep 2011 06:51

Really lovely poem Lynn.xx

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Dave Bradley

Fri 16th Sep 2011 00:13

A good one Lynn - has a kind of flatness in the style which reflects well how you must have been feeling. I hope it was a long time ago.

<Deleted User> (6895)

Thu 15th Sep 2011 22:48


hey up!!!!
its only a cracker-thats all!!

well done you clever girl!!

me'n'her.xx

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John Coopey

Thu 15th Sep 2011 22:07

Dry your eyes, Lynn.
Loved the 2nd and 3rd verses best.

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