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Ghosts of Rivington Moor

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Ghosts of Rivington Moor

 

On a clear day from this windswept range

your eyes can see as far as the coast

and the mountains of North Wales

in heavy rain they can see little worth talking about

blindfolded by a dismal blanket of cloud

 

Centuries ago these hills were ablaze

warning of invasion from foreign lands

it’s pike still stands in solitary recognition

 

Up here could be the top of the world

northwest towns sprawl at my feet down below

their lights sparkle like a thousand jewels at nightfall

 

But this oppressive terrain takes no prisoners

in a blizzard on Winter Hill,

falling ice from the TV mast can kill

it’s not advisable to go up there on your own

 

UFO sightings, fond references in songs -

some of the other things to give this place fame,

but the iron Scotsman’s Stump stands cold

a merchant banker murdered in his prime

bones from aircraft disasters lie in these hills

only the hardiest of dead souls walk these moors

 

As I walk this cold, unwelcoming land

in the rain and hail, I hear them wail

It’s perishing, I feel so wet, cold and so alone.

 

The towering red lights shine for miles in the dark

but they’re now out of sight, they won’t help you tonight

now I’m scared, I really should be going home.

 

Atrocious weather relentlessly closes in,

driving snow in a lashing gale

and I can feel them behind me,

they’re not going to save me

and I don’t think anyone will find me

 

I can barely see the path, I pray it’s the one for home

 

Please let it be the one for home.

 

Jeff Dawson July 2011

PCGhosts

◄ Manchester Ritz

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tony sheridan

Wed 27th Feb 2013 20:40

Nice one Jeff. Take care, Tony.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 19th Aug 2011 16:58

A super poem, Jeff, strong and fast-paced with great emotive imagery. The scene at the end is excellent, with its helpless 'prayer'.

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Elaine Booth

Wed 17th Aug 2011 00:38

Very evocative, Jeff. Reading it, you can feel the fear creeping up as it's getting darker and the weather gets worse. really enjoyed it. x

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Greg Freeman

Sat 23rd Jul 2011 12:40

Very atmospheric, Jeff. It does make you feel you're up there. I particularly like the towns sparkling "like a thousand jewels". Comforting beauty amid the bleakness.

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Francine

Sat 23rd Jul 2011 01:30

Spooky - the feelings this evokes reminds me of both being caught in a blizzard, and an old graveyard!

'only the hardiest of dead souls walk these moors'


p.s. I love the word 'Atrocious' - I used to say it all the time : )

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Fri 22nd Jul 2011 20:15

Wow. Very haunting and scary. Indeed it does make you shiver. Makes me glad to be indoors tonight! Great piece.

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Andy N

Fri 22nd Jul 2011 19:33

one of your best, Jeff I feel.. The ending works particularly well, m8.. top one - proud of you.. A

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alisonsmiles68@gmail.com

Fri 22nd Jul 2011 13:58

ooh yes, I too got the shivers down the spine. I've walked winter hill in a blizzard with my teenager nephew. One of the rare occasions I've bailed out of a walk, and only then with the compass in constant use.

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Laura Taylor

Fri 22nd Jul 2011 10:39

ooOOoo I got goosebumps reading this!!! Powerful stuff Jeff - really captures the haunting windswept nature of the place. Wow!

That last line is a killer!

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Dave Bradley

Thu 21st Jul 2011 23:15

I can't remember one of yours that I've liked as much Jeff (doesn't mean there isn't one, I've got a rotten memory). I go up on the hills in these sort of conditions and am barmy enough to enjoy it and it really brought memories to life for me. Excellent!

PS You could try a GPS unit but maybe the poetry would suffer

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Rachel Bond

Thu 21st Jul 2011 22:05

great poem jeff :)

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