City my City

by Phil Golding

Monday 4th August 2008 10:59 am (first posted Sunday 3rd August 2008 11:44 pm)

I went to London to visit the Queen

She was in a bohemian in rhapsody

I went to see the trooping of the colour

I was disappointed; it was in black and white

Took a trip to Madame Tussauds

Found two women with foils

Experience the London Eye; I thought a must, closed

There was a notice, said ‘Gone to Spec-savers’

I went to see Nelson’s Column

Talk about getting an inferiority complex

I travelled underground, I travelled over-ground

I was wombling free

Getting to attractions was no problem,

There was a park and ride service using the M25

God bless our capital, God bless our Queen

God bless Gordon Brown our new Mr Been

◄ Jack

Take one thought ►

Comments

Andy N

Mon 25th Aug 2008 20:41

I think you read this out at Freed Up, didn't you? If so, I remember enjoying it although I do think Janet's suggestion was spot on thou!

darren thomas

Tue 5th Aug 2008 10:28

That's the beauty of poetry - it's subjective. To me, I enjoyed those lines. Work on the rest!
Only joking Phil. This is light hearted fun that would work fine in performance. Speaking of which, you were noted for your absence at Wigan's last open mic event.C'mon, you know it makes sense. See you on the 14th?

<Deleted User> (5646)

Mon 4th Aug 2008 23:27

Hi Philip, If you'd left the 4th line without the disappointed bit and dropped the specsaver line, this would be even more humorous than it already is.
In my very wombly experience and opinion.

Thanks, Janet.x

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