What's life minus soul?
Soaking up rain.
Still, dry to the core.
Bathing in sound.
Caught in encompassing silence.
Droplets on my cheek.
The thirst of drought within subsides.
Waves of joy and laughter deafen me, and I am showered with hope.
Showered in life's rain.
<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 5th Jul 2011 23:28
nicely fluid-if you will pardon the pun.Rain,always badly needed-to make beer!
Hi Amy;
I am well impressed with this.. Short and showered with hope... Probably one to perform this..
Particularly like 'thirst of drought within subsides'.
See you soon x
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Neil Fawcett
Thu 21st Jul 2011 11:14
I like the ethereal feel of this. For what it's worth I think it would benefit from a bit of trimming.
What's life minus soul.
Soaking up rain and still dry to the core.
Bathing in sound but caught in encompassing silence.
I feel drops on my cheeks,
then the thirst subsides.
I am deafened by waves of laughter.
I shower in life's rain.