Ring of Roses

 

 

Crisp within her vase

Dead red roses on display

Fragile in the light

 

Lack of sickly scent

Seeing beauty in decay

Brittleness deflects

 

Look but do not touch

Your fingers are forbidden

Petals turn to dust

 

Floral deviance

Delighting in senescence

Ring of rosy death

 

 

 

haiku

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Petrova Fairhurst

Wed 20th Jul 2011 16:16

As a person who takes ages to throw away flowers, even after the petals have fallen off - I love this! "beauty in decay"

Terry White

Sat 25th Jun 2011 03:31

I love it.

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Elaine Booth

Fri 24th Jun 2011 23:25

Very fine poem, Laura. Fabulous detail and imagery. X

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 21st Jun 2011 10:45

This is really good, Laura, a fine example of haiku. The whole series develops a theme, but each 'stanza' could stand alone, is wholly sufficient on to itself. I look forward to meeting you in Sale next Tuesday.

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Andy N

Tue 21st Jun 2011 08:15

very sharp stuff, Laura.. lot of detail in a few words here.. impressive x

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Cate Greenlees

Mon 20th Jun 2011 21:13

Hi Laura, what an interesting piece! Yes it is tagged haiku, Dave must have just missed it.
Floral deviance and beauty in decay wouldnt be my idea of a bunch of flowers, but after seeing the winning garden of the Chelsea flower show which looked just like the field across the road from me, who knows?
I like the spareness here which makes every word count. Clever title too!
Cate xx

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Laura Taylor

Mon 20th Jun 2011 15:49

Japanese? Interesting! Cheers Dave.

Err, it already IS tagged as a haiku. Is it not showing or something?

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Dave Bradley

Mon 20th Jun 2011 13:53

Any poem about a physical object which makes one really SEE and FEEL it is working well, and this does - vividly. But it's not just about the object, it's about the passing of time. It almost feels Japanese in the way that it expresses this.

Will you be tagging it as a haiku?

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