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gazelle ghazal

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Quiet as a hart in the forest

She’s tiptoeing, his tame gazelle

 

With caribou songs she serenades -

Are his ears deaf to his tame gazelle?

 

He looks about, antlers challenging

An elk blinded by his tame gazelle

 

With springbok start, did he notice?

She’s whispering, his tame gazelle

 

The antelope are all stampeding

Yet she stands stock still, his tame gazelle

 

Living in Eland - she surely does?

He’s missed the path to his tame gazelle

 

He is a great moose without a soul!

She, invisible, his tame gazelle

 

A woodland meeting, a clash of horns

A side-step dance with his tame gazelle

 

Stepping on delicate cloven hooves

He tramples her down, his tame gazelle

 

Split second timing, she’s up again

Quicker than him, his tame gazelle

 

Sparks fly in cascade as she escapes

Free, joyous - no more his tame gazelle

 

 

 

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◄ wayne

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winston plowes

Fri 11th Feb 2011 00:21

This is a great piece Ann. One meaning of 'Ghazal' is the dying cries of the gazelle as you may well know so that ties things together nicely. Clever to how you have incorporated the different words for this type of animal in the first line of 6 shers, maybe they could be placed more evenly in the ghazal? liked. Win x

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Dave Bradley

Thu 10th Feb 2011 15:11

Excellent. Harder than it looks.

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Thu 10th Feb 2011 15:08

I really enjoy reading this form and yours is just super with a lovely story and imagery. Very enjoyable :-)

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