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So, everyone is busy but for me.

Yet I feel a contentment absolute.

Two buzzards spar across the sky.

A prelude to an early mating?

 

A day in hand, and what to do with it?

Before company leads me back to life.

I think I’ll spend it thinking of the year.

And counting buzzards -what could be more apt?

 

Each span of life that passes since you left

Brings danger, sweet conundrums, love and fear.

I find a freedom now I live alone

But would I swap it for your presence, dear?

 

Life is so full of questions and it’s strange

That answers do not pop up as you’d hope.

The path leads on, it’s three years now my love.

I am alone but happy in my way.

So if you’re watching, wonder,

And then, stay!

 

 

◄ silver polish

you called me ►

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<Deleted User> (8943)

Thu 6th Jan 2011 13:09

Enjoyed this one too Ann, love the image of buzzards sparring.

There are quite a few lines that mirror my own existence so I can really step inside this piece, thank you. x

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winston plowes

Fri 24th Dec 2010 21:53

nice one Ann, have a great holls. Win XXX

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alisonsmiles68@gmail.com

Fri 24th Dec 2010 16:12

counting buzzards was a great expression, loving your work as usual.

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Lynn Dye

Fri 24th Dec 2010 14:09

Such a sad and lovely poem, Ann.
All the Best for Christmas,
Love, Lynn xx

Philipos

Thu 23rd Dec 2010 21:49

A lovely poem throughout Ann and where IMO the last line text was powerful enough not to need enlargement

<Deleted User> (7212)

Thu 23rd Dec 2010 21:33

I agree with Cyn - and sometimes just one unexpected word can do it for me... this is when poetry transcends normality & becomes sublime

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 23rd Dec 2010 21:27

I had a 'literary' friend who once said that if even one line was striking then a poem had been worth reading. 'counting buzzards' does it for me.

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Dave Bradley

Thu 23rd Dec 2010 20:21

Enjoyed this Ann. The pace of the early stanzas perfectly matches the mood of wistful reflection. And then the ENDING!!! Which I like

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John Aikman

Thu 23rd Dec 2010 19:49

Not sure it needed the final boldness and accentuation...it is tremendously subtle up until that point. Fabulous poem. I don't think it needs any 'font trickery' or punctuation to get its message across.

I think exclamation marks have no place in poetry...ever!!!! (but that's just me....oh, and nearly everybody else, except a few...and who cares what they think?)

Just be confident that its message is there...

Lovely stuff.

:-)

Jx

<Deleted User> (7212)

Thu 23rd Dec 2010 18:08

Lovely & SAD!!!!!!!!!!!!!
(and not just because you said nice things about mine).xx

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Chris Co

Thu 23rd Dec 2010 17:42

Very touching and true of heart.

Christmas is many things.

My best Ann.

Chris

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