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Snow at Solstice

 We are snug blanketed under a layer, thick and soft

the wreck of the garden beautified by it

the rooves insulated

gate iron curlicued

thickened in outline

 a stuttering blurred underlining

snow font.

Walking and feeling the tense squeak

unfamiliar gait to ache our thighs

we are un-gendered,

muffled, pillowed

crack of face, eyes skenning

comfort only in the floor

to plant our feet on something stable

and then the stamping

shaking white and moulded grey from cleats and tread

stinking of the sweet and cold,

bringing outside in.

But then it’s only right

at this time of the year

when we’re

syrup clad in a noon

that’s almost dawn and nearly dusk.

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Steve Regan

Tue 15th Mar 2011 18:15

"skenning" ... remmeber saying and hearing that a lot when I was growing up in Wigan.

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David Cooke

Sat 29th Jan 2011 10:30

HI Rachel Playing Catchup on WOL. Haven't been on for a while & I know you posted this a while back, but I've just found it! Some great descriptive touches - but I can't say I miss the b****y stuff!

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Andy N

Wed 22nd Dec 2010 08:05

excellent stuff, rachel..

'we are un-gendered,

muffled, pillowed

crack of face, eyes skenning

comfort only in the floor

to plant our feet on something stable'

i particularly love, but it's a excellent piece all round! x

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Gus Jonsson

Tue 21st Dec 2010 16:03

Wow Rachel superbo love the line

'crack of face, eyes skenning'

I always wear the inside of my nose on my chin when I;m out in the snow...

Wonderful poem

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Chris Dawson

Tue 21st Dec 2010 15:04

Lovely piece.

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Ray Miller

Tue 21st Dec 2010 10:42

Lovely poem."the wreck of the garden beautified by it" - I'll save that one for my wife.Never heard "skenning" before and not in my dictionary."syrup clad" is great.


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Ann Foxglove

Tue 21st Dec 2010 09:22

Hi Rach - lovely and sunny here! Did you seen the lunar eclipse earlier? Lovely poem - not sure about "stinking" though. Have a good solstice! xx

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John Darwin

Tue 21st Dec 2010 09:03

marvellous piece Rachel, curlicued is a great word;

'when we're
syrup clad in a noon
that's almost dawn and nearly dusk' a perfect ending.



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