Isobel

How Clever is my Daughter?

Wednesday 22nd September 2010 9:28 pm

Sorry to brag - but I'm just so proud! Wanted to share a poem with you that my 10 year old has just written (in all of 5 mins). I know the site is for adults - but it is good to know that we have some very keen young uns champing at the bit to join just as soon as they are able...

If Life Was a Book

I wish my life was a book

To be opened, closed, put down

Fixed in readers minds

I want to be remembered

For fighting a dragon

Not for forgetting

To brush my teeth…

To step among the pages

Of an author’s mind

Running with Heidi

In an overgrown field

Sailing with Jenna

On the endless seas

Books are where

The time never ticks

Never growing old

Always ending with

A ‘Happily Ever After’

Oh how I wish

My life was a book…

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Comments

Elaine Booth

Sun 26th Sep 2010 23:05

A lovely piece! Keep on writing - you clearly love it and so do we, your audience!

Cate Greenlees

Fri 24th Sep 2010 11:36

A lovely poem Maria. I can see why you always have your nose in a book when I see you. Your use of language is exceptional for you age, and your ability to express your thoughts and feelings of a high standard.
It definitely runs in the genes! {te he he...}
Aunty Cate xx

Isobel

Fri 24th Sep 2010 08:45

Yes - it is mature for her age Andy. I think Cynthia was also very perceptive in her comment. My kids have been through some turbulent times and have had a lot of upheaval. They have come through it all now - or so I like to think. An understanding of the darker side of life shows in my daughter's poem though.
I think sometimes you have to have eperienced sadness or truama in some way to be able to fully empathise with others. I can often tell the difference between those who have had lucky charmed lives and those who haven't by the way they react to others and situations and poetry even.
That's a subject of a poem I've half written - I'll have to get round to finishing it one day.

Thanks again everyone. x

Andy N

Fri 24th Sep 2010 08:19

one thing i didn't add too, Isobel was the fact how mature this is for a 10 year old.. i've still got all of my pieces from when i was 10 onwards (i store them all in little A5 hardback books) and it was frankly terrible.. This however isn't - I'm dead chuffed she is writing and writing - hopefully she'll be able to carry this on!! x

Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 23rd Sep 2010 20:42

It is very clever and imaginative, and very sad. IMO, if the thoughts are real, and not assumed for display, she is not ten years old inside; she has seen rough times. And very proud of her writing you should be. In my family our 16 year-old is biting at my heels, and I'm peacock-pleased too.

Dave Bradley

Thu 23rd Sep 2010 16:00

She's got it! Her mother's daughter.

Ann Foxglove

Thu 23rd Sep 2010 15:16

I wrote 2 poems when I was young. One interminable one about a cat made out of snow and one I can kinda remember - about being attacked by a pteradactyl. Wrote it at about 14 - may post it!

HAVE posted it!

Dave D Poet Rhumour

Thu 23rd Sep 2010 14:55

Well done that girl - I see the talent flows in the genes :) I had my grandfather to thank for my early efforts, he recorded my efforts when I was about the same age... Best wishes, Dave

chris yates

Thu 23rd Sep 2010 14:43

clever clever daughter inspirational to read and sense her love of the written word WELL DONE

<Deleted User> (8286)

Thu 23rd Sep 2010 14:01

Brilliant poem,

Maybe your daughter would like to enter this poem in the Young Gifted Writers Awards for ages seven to seventeen.

All selected pieces will be published an authors will receive awards. Submissons can be emailed to: submissions@freelittlebirds.co.uk
(please include full name and age on poems)

Michelle

Isobel

Thu 23rd Sep 2010 08:42

Thank you Ann and Andy. I loved the teeth bit too! It really shows you that a child wrote it. Funnily enough I don't have to nag her Andy - she just loves books and writing - her only problem is that she has too many all on the go at once. I only ever read one at a time - I can't multi read.
Thanks again all. xx

Andy N

Thu 23rd Sep 2010 08:24

lovely piece, isobel.. has a lovely flow to it.. defo a natural writer / poet there... (keep nagging her!!!!) xx

Ann Foxglove

Thu 23rd Sep 2010 08:00

"I want to be remembered

For fighting a dragon

Not for forgetting

To brush my teeth…"

My fave bit from a wonderful poem! She sure is a poet!! xxxx's to both of you!

<Deleted User> (5763)

Thu 23rd Sep 2010 00:27

Absolutely Fabulous!

winston plowes

Wed 22nd Sep 2010 23:29

Tes, daughters are cleaver things when they choose. Mine is also 10. Should there be a section for younger members? now there's a thing! I thought we decided that this is not an adult site but that it was ok for young adults if supervised. Win x

Isobel

Wed 22nd Sep 2010 22:30

Thanks to both of you. Yes I am proud. The only help I gave was to type it up and lay it out the way a poem would be - I added the ellipsis. The words and ideas are 100% hers. It will be marvellous to see how her poetry develops in the future. So far she seems to be the only one who has inherited my love of language and capacity to day dream... essential things for a poet I think - though I'm not sure it gets us far in life!

xx

Lynn Dye

Wed 22nd Sep 2010 22:25

This is so good, Isobel, incredible to realise it is by a 10 year old. No wonder you are so proud of her! xx

Francine

Wed 22nd Sep 2010 22:08

Bravo Maria !
You should be so proud... And you too Isobel ; )

xxx

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