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The Eighty Eight Handshake

Affectionate and shapely fingers, forking fast but sometimes falling feline,

half asleep,

make ten places, cold and white, come to state and then reverberate,

a peaking zephyr with plaiting hands,

friends with the dark pools of fish and kings,

kelp beards and pearl girls,

trident chords,

heavenly.

Oh go, supple pounce! Into the finger cut - the mighty cradle of teeth, and cantillate;

stirring up the sounds in a soup of hoof and gale, the whistling wing of a bird shot,

and the heap of a lover’s love of love,

and make a fallen shoulder of me in the wake of your mouth’s width;

the  hit, hit, hit

of

the tight rope holding

me so

on this precipice;

the sharp angle,

flattening my breath with wild sounds

and pressed black flowers.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 9th Sep 2010 21:31

Well, Jo has fallen completely under the spell of your amazing poetry, Marianne, - excellent taste on her part. 'trident chords' is superb in the 'sea' context'. The whole work sings with verbal beauty as you express your expansive ideas.

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Andy N

Wed 8th Sep 2010 08:16

i have a similar opinion like Jo here, Marianne as in the fact i don't have a clue what is going on with the narrative, but the language is brilliant... the first line for example 'Affectionate and shapely fingers, forking fast but sometimes falling feline' which is a terrific opening for example..

top stuff, Marianne (Would hate to have to try and perform this however!) x

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Tue 7th Sep 2010 19:53

Ooh, this is delicious! I love the way that you play fast and loose with alliterative sounds, and it all trips off the brain-tongue in a VERY satisfying way. I don't pretend to understand what's going on in terms of a narrative, but I suspect there's more to it than I'm picking up. Is there more to say? I feel like I want more on 'the precipice' and its repercussions.

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