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Final visit? ( fictional )

Bedded.

She lies in a clinically impersonal white room.

 

An uncovered, clenched, claw-like hand trembles,

as if it had been, a closed decaying, wind shaken, flower,

her eyes, too weak to raise and, see me.

 

Piercing an arm, devoid of normal colour, a conduit linked needle,

supplying medicial hope.

 

The space between us, needs to be closer still, so that I am within,

her struggling whispers, hearing distance

 

any closer, and I'm certain, that I would have felt as though,

I was with her,

in her living Hell.    

◄ Beneath an audience of Stars

Haiku; illegal loggers. ►

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Bethany Sallis

Mon 29th Apr 2024 17:36

Sincerely sorry about your Mum., M. C. May she rest in peace and, may God bless her. Thank you for the very kind comment.

Bethany

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 29th Apr 2024 17:18

Strong stuff! Although fictional, it is a powerful insight into a desperately sad situation. It took my own mind back to attendances at my mother's bedside in the last weeks of a
long life, albeit that she was free from intrusive medical apparatus. The feeling of personal impotence remains all powerful.

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Stephen Gospage

Mon 29th Apr 2024 07:20

A moving, almost shocking poem, Bethany. The conclusion is quite devastating.

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Bethany Sallis

Sun 28th Apr 2024 23:56

Manish, Holden, Stephen, John, thank you gentlemen.

Bethany

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Bethany Sallis

Sun 28th Apr 2024 11:45

I'll ' OOER! ' to that thought John.

👍 muchly appreciated.

Bethany

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John Coopey

Sun 28th Apr 2024 11:42

Powerful and graphic insight into what awaits us all, Bethany.

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