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The blacksmiths hammer rings down the ages

Forging the steel on the anvil of life

White hot metal the souls of men

Drawn across the black face

Formed across the horn

Bent to conform.

 

But what about the sparks

Breaking free with each blow

Bow not to the pattern

But dance in the glow

 

 

Each briefly shining escaping the heat

In air quickly dying , shooting stars

A moments freedom ,catching the eye

Dancing like girls in fields of rye

 

A lesson to all , as we wade through the mire

To be moulded and bent like the steel in the fire

To conform to the shape that’s formed on the horn

Or to dance like the sparks free from the storm

 

01/02/2022. 22:05-22:57. 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 3rd Feb 2022 15:15

Conformity has its place in all Nature. Survival can depend
upon it. But human existence allows for the sparks to fly free
from the furnace of life and what it gives the world. Even when
sparks fade they still leave something in the air, for nothing truly
"dies" but instead transfers its substance in another form..

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Stephen Atkinson

Wed 2nd Feb 2022 17:23

What John & Keith said. Excellent

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Pete (edbreathe)

Wed 2nd Feb 2022 10:02

John & Keith, thanks very much for the comments, and Holden and Stephen for liking 🙏 Much appreciated

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John Botterill

Wed 2nd Feb 2022 08:58

Brilliant use of analogy, Pete. Skilful, erudite and entertaining!

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keith jeffries

Wed 2nd Feb 2022 05:20

This poem requires some serious reading and understanding as it has a message for all of us who are being bent to conform. It is a poem finely tuned and written at a time when we need to take stock of where and who we are in this life. Who is pulling the strings? Who dances to the tune? Are we being moulded or able to break free? A topical poem in a world where dystopia has raised its profile.
Thank you for this
Keith

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