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Flesh

In the glory of your love,

I lie naked on satin,

Our eyes transfixed

As I watch you undress,

You murmur words in Latin.


Now you peel off your shirt,

I watch your muscles ripple.

You unfasten your belt

And bend to suck my nipple.


I reach for you

But you escape my grasp

To discard the last of your clothes.

Excitement runs through me

As you join me at last,

We kiss with aching longing,

I feel your heart beat fast.


You whisper words of love to me,

In adoring fashion.

Skilful hands roam my body

Until it arches with passion.

Your foreplay teases

And then it pleases,

Bringing me to the heights.


Flesh against flesh,

Skin upon skin,

My body hungrily

Welcomes you in.


Through the good times and bad,

We’ve been so in love

For quite a few years,

Sharing whatever life throws at us,

Our hopes, our dreams, our fears.


Moonlight snakes through

Hastily drawn curtains.

A breath of a breeze

Hits my bedside candle.

It flickers

Then recovers,

Like our love,

Too hot to handle!


Moving together

Sensuously dramatic,

Giving pleasure

So ecstatic

Until at last we cry out in bliss,

Once recovered, seal with a kiss.

◄ Warm Embrace

Flesh (Free Verse) ►

Comments

<Deleted User> (8408)

Sun 11th Jul 2010 23:57

Hi Lynn - sexy stuff! Loved reading both this one and your free verse and liked them both for different reasons. All in all, I think the free verse flows better and sounds more sophisticated, BUT... you have some beautiful moments in this one. I love the 6th stanza, where all of a sudden you capture feelings of genuine love and affection between these two hot bodies and it adds a certain depth to the piece. I liked the rhyme in the 7th stanza - too hot to handle indeed! - and its lightheartedness adds a buoyancy to the poem. I love that you can write about anything and I really look forward to reading more of your work. Many thanks for sharing. Dianna.

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Lynn Dye

Sun 4th Jul 2010 17:30

Lol, thanks to All.
On reflection I decided the first two lines of verse 4 didn't scan well, so I have re-written these, which actually now makes him not such a multi-lingual clever dick!!! (or a language teacher, hee hee!)
Free verse version to follow...
xx

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sun 4th Jul 2010 17:12

reminds me of a shop we have next door to our chippy-a flesh n sexshop! tee...hee..SW

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Jeff Dawson

Sun 4th Jul 2010 14:44

Blimey Lynn, something for every occasion it says on your profile, this is romantic and sensual for a sunday morning! Great stuff.

Thanks for comment on 'Our Father' - I had to keep changing the words as the nightmare got worse! ha, best wishes Jeff X

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sun 4th Jul 2010 13:43

Being a man of the cloth(ears) I find this quite,quite disgraceful,especially being a holy day-shocking! shocking! please write some more-ASAP! OOO! I,m overcome with emulsion-or something similar-ha!red 'ot! (HISSS)TEFAN-XXX

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 4th Jul 2010 12:18

Wow! Latin, French and romance all at once! Is he a language teacher, your guy? x

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Isobel

Sun 4th Jul 2010 11:26

There are some nice ideas in here Lynn but some of the rhyme feels forced.
Have you ever tried writing in free verse? I found it really hard to do at first, cos like you, I like the musical feel of rhyme. Sometimes free verse does feel more natural though. x

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