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The lioness shall be my mother

Her huge strength will be my shelter

Golden arms will hug me tightly

Lioness will be my mother.

 

The elephant shall be my father

In power and wisdom he shall guide me

With noble thoughts he will instruct me

Elephant will be my father.

 

Let the zebra be my sister

Let us run in joy together

Ever playful, ever cheerful

Let the zebra be my sister.

 

Let the dolphin be my brother

He will always lend me laughter

Rolling, splashing through the water

Let the dolphin be my brother.

 

Let the eagle be my lover

Through the sky we’ll soar completely

Whirling in each other’s slipstream

Eagle, partner, friend and lover.

 

 

 

 

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 27th May 2010 06:46

Blimey Tommy - you windin' me up? ;-) I promise if I ever write the sequal ("Let My Second Cousin Twice Removed Be A Gnu") that the giraffe will have a special verse just for you! But don't hold your breath! x

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Tommy Carroll

Thu 27th May 2010 00:42

But I like giraffes, why are there no giraffes?

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 26th May 2010 19:57

Oh! Like the new pic too!

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 26th May 2010 19:56

There is a prayer-like quality to this Ann. I liked it but was also unnerved by its rhythm, strangely.

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 26th May 2010 16:01

I guess I was dreaming of a time when the lion would lie down with the lamb etc, and was given the idea by the little picture (top of this page) even tho' it seems more domestic animals are involved here. So I won't be applying for that job at London Zoo then!

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 26th May 2010 14:49

...but why is an elephant wise? and a zebra playful? don't zebra's run to escape lions? who try to eat them? omg your mother eating your sister!...I shiver to think of you in charge-Johnny Morrisy like- of a zoo.

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Andy N

Wed 26th May 2010 08:15

yeah, i think the last stanza ties it together.. enjoyed it.. x

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 26th May 2010 07:21

Gordon Bennet! I don't have to make sense do I? ;-) Anyway, thanks for commenting. I guess, Tommy, I was trying to imply (possibly in a Native American animal spirit way - tho the animals are not from there - except eagles) how I would like to choose different characteristics from different creatures, to be my ideal family. I am not a very literal person! xx

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Wed 26th May 2010 05:37

I liked this poem and understood it in my own way. Thanks for sharing. With warmest wishes, Larisa

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 26th May 2010 02:41

...but none of this makes sense.

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Anthony Emmerson

Tue 25th May 2010 23:34

Very impressive Ann! Trochaic tetrameter indeed. Longfellow would be beaming at this African variation of his epic.

Regards,
A.E.

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Lynn Dye

Tue 25th May 2010 20:50

I love all of it. A great poem, Ann.

<Deleted User> (7212)

Tue 25th May 2010 20:43

Hi Ann - not really my kind of poem - I thought, until the last verse, which needs the foregoing ones to put it in context - masterful !

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