SAND DEVILS

The day is long and hot

stretching out to sand

like the slit in a tank

in plain sight

offering no respite. 

There may be blood 

on unfamiliar hands.

 

Hearts beat in crosshatch

to a peculiar rhythm

the pace of unfamiliar lands. 

Strange harsh voices coming

from behind barriers to progress

and silent curious children. 

◄ WELL DEVELOPED

ILLICIT VISIT ►

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raypool

Sun 9th Aug 2020 20:51

Yes Graham children will always be monstrously affected by virtue of their vulnerability and need for total support. They can of course be trained to hate for the same reason. ad infinitum.

Your comment is most welcome John, I tend to write short stuff mostly, if only to save energy.

Thank you Jennifer as always. Sometimes as with this one I start with an image and work it up - this began with just a hot day like a slit.

Thank you all Vautaw Jordyn and Stephen for your valued likes.

Ray

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jennifer Malden

Sat 8th Aug 2020 15:37

Masterly as usual Ray, brief and concentrated. We must have been writing about the same tragedy at much the same time.

Jennifer

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John Coopey

Sat 8th Aug 2020 11:45

The more powerful for its brevity, Ray.

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Paul Sayer

Sat 8th Aug 2020 10:52

Amen to that Graham.

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 8th Aug 2020 06:02

I am sadly very ambivalent about all this strife in the Middle East, except for the effects it all has on the children. How can they ruin the young lives so badly in the name of their bloody religion. They are truly damned!
I love Ray’s brevity in this piece. Suffer the children etc........

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raypool

Fri 7th Aug 2020 22:58

Thanks for coming back Paul. In the UK at Portsmouth were fleets of wartime destroyers awaiting breaking, your comment just reminded me . That was in 1952. So much heavy metal wherever.

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Paul Sayer

Fri 7th Aug 2020 19:20

Ray, well captured.
The huge long lines of tanks on railway sidings that were used in the unending war that are now useless heaps of DU contaminated scrap that the children play on in the USA is a testament to the REAL ongoing harrowing horrors.

Thank you for a great write.

Paul.

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raypool

Fri 7th Aug 2020 18:26

Thanks Keith and also Paul for your interest. The image in my head was conflict in any threatening middle east country It attempts to describe the claustrophobic atmosphere in a tank and the alien perception of an enemy. I hope that helps!

Thanks for the likes Jennifer Jordyn and Stephen.

Ray

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Paul Sayer

Fri 7th Aug 2020 18:04

Ray, I would love to know what inspired your words here.

Their choice is precise and direct.

Like Keith, I am also looking beyond the horizon to see.

The Radar needed is already fine-tuned to reflect off the ionosphere.

HARRP strings are being plucked as I type.

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keith jeffries

Fri 7th Aug 2020 17:39

Ray,

A poem which has stirred my imagination but exactly where to I shall soon discover.

Thanks for this

Keith

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