Hi Dave - it looks like you are on a space binge at the moment :)
Thought I'd better point out that it is Senryu - not Kuryu - or whatever it was that I made up. I was just being silly by imagining what we could call a cross between the Haiku and Senryu forms. Apparently Haiku is to do with nature and Senryu more to do with emotions. I didn't realise that till Steve Black pointed it out. x

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Hi Val
thanks for feedback on the hairy beast!!! I will read especially for you, not that you are hairy of course xxxxx Love Pete

sorry I have not been around a while! I'll be back one day!!!!!!

Peter

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I know! So sad... I was trying to post and inadvertently deleted everything because I am on my cell phone! Ughhh! I am without Internet at the moment, so I will re-post later when I go to the library.

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Wow that was quick! :D Ahhh, well it wasn't quite the poetry alone that made me love myself, but it was all tied up with words, and language, and creating my own self. The poems DO lay waste to that inner chaos though...can't begin to tell you the relief I feel from writing it all out. Makes so much sense to do it, feels so RIGHT. Thanks :) Feels good, don't it :D

Hope to meet you at the xmas wol 'do'! xx

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Yes you are a moon goddess. My website is www.mooncalendar.me.uk if you want to find out all about the calendar, and on that site you will find a button that says BUY NOW, linked to PayPal, but if you prefer the oldfashioned way, you can just copy the address and send me a cheque and I will send you moon calendars as per order. I have put quite a few poems on the website too.'girl' is not easy to rhyme is it, and you see I had elided 'glass' in the second stanza, a nice example of cohesion there, so I had to put 'glass' in somewhere. Also people make such a fuss about to rhyme or not to rhyme that I feel embarrassed to be searching for rhymes. It can get too contrived easily.

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Thanks for your comment on my poem Ann. I took your advice and read Chris's poem and link - a most unusual song - unlyrical and unpoetic words that somehow sounded musical (I mean the utube link) - that's an achievement! Thanks.

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I think you are a free and wondering spirit with fire in your belly and hot coals in your brain just waiting to be fanned into flame again. All you need now is a sleek white mare, snorting and champing at your grip on the reins, to take on the whole world once more. Who says only men have to be knights on white horses! Yes, I'm an idiot, but something about you really inspires me.

BTW, tell me about your MOON calendars. 'Cynthia' is the 'Goddess of the Moon'; so I'm interested.

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Thank you John, for reading and commenting so nicely on my poem 'Passionate Fib'... I was inspired to try something new. : )

p.s. Funny you think I'm a 'Nightbird'... And you should write a Fibonacci poem about the 'statue type thing'... : )

Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)

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Thank you Carole, for checking out my attempt at a Fibonacci poem...
Yes, they are fun to write... sometimes the syllable count depends on how you pronounce a word too - enough to drive you mad! I wrote one for you too - not sure if it's comedic, but it's on the blog of my 'Passionate Fib'... x

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Thank you Winston, for reading and commenting so nicely on
'Passionate Fib'... and what a surprise it was that you dug through
the archives to read 'Alone'... : )

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Hi Greg
Many thanks for your comments on Rocket Man - I agree about 'is' and 'are' - appreciated. P

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Hi Ann

Much obliged for your comments on Rocket Man - greatly appreciated.

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Hi John
Much obliged for the comments on Rocket Man - appreciated.

Philipos

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Mornin to Dye,s dog-Dye,s dad-and family including the English patient!-Mr Blind Pugh(moi) finally got to see the typo you tried so hard to point out in 'Baggage'-DOH! ta Lynn-lotsa love and get wells soon to you-Mr W-xx-B-xx

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Mornin sniffy-I,ve got me ski,s on and me satnav round me neck,a large bag of cattylitter in me backpack-now where is this hovel...sorry-cottage, of yours? as to me poo-im...its a pikky I took from my hang glider as I soared above your 'ouse-which he -was-divebombing or indeed committing hari-kari-please look in your fireplace-put me down for a wing and a leg with stuffing! ta Coughing Gertie-get well soon! do NOT be worrying your 'blocked'little cranium about me-I,ll struggle through or pass into martyrdom! ps have changed me suicidal seagull/skylark poo-im to...oh look fer yerself! hmph!-xx-G-xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Eh up - yes, it could change the world I believe if we were all given that clean slate, if all of us damaged ones could break the cycle. Unfortunately it doesn't often work out that way, but I was damned sure that my lass would not suffer the same way I did...that she would know herself to be loved, and would be treated with dignity and respect, as should all humans.

Thanks for your comment :)

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Hi John, Re Ghazals . Yes, I have been studying these for over 2 years now. You can see / hear more background about this here... thanks for looking Win x

http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=11578

Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)

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Thanks for your kind comments on my Ghazal. It's a bit of a cheat really, I wrote it ages ago, long before WOL, it was one of my very first experiments with writing poetry. Traditionally Ghazal's are always about love..longing and separation, though that tradition seems to be slipping a bit as more folks experiment with them. I really, really was lost when I wrote it...not so lost now. : )

jx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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When I find the strength of journey to read between the lines of others portrals, yours,then momentary I can escape my present day shell,and escape to another,past tense,but real enough to become enlightened.Thankyou.

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

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Hey John :)
Thanks for your comment, appreciate it!

Rachael x

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2 headed boy poem simmering away nicely, wrote a bit more of it today. Win x

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

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Thanks for your comments on Snow on the Pass, Win. You're right, there is a real story attached to it, and the journey is Sheffield to Liverpool and back, across the Pennines. Always dodgy at this time of year. Greg

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

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John, thanks for your comments on Snow on the Pass. I've given the game away about it now, somewhat anyway; hope that hasn't spoilt it for you. Greg

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Hi Winston. Weather permitting I will be there.

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Awww! me poor(old? nay lass!)Yanty! the only advice I can give you is get a beechams down yer cakehole and double up on the baby-gro,s..even if they do clash with the yellow/green mules clacking up and down the High Street-no seriously-ahem-beechams are brill(IMHO)love the snuggy fox pikky/image-ta chudgy-Mr Snifan Wilde-xxps can I have a long distance clap for doing me monthly 24 tins of cat food donation for our local sanctuary(Bleakholt)-I bung it in their bin in Asda-which neatly leads on to a related funny incident-did the same last month as they were bringing new stock in-and put it all around the donations bin-I had to climb a dirty great mountain of boxes to put the tins in-and! got bleedin trapped between two bleedin palettes of stuff(Mr Bean or wot!)to make you laugh yer phlegm up,heres another Mr Bean tale-neighbour of ours has a sloping driveway-(upwards)and was struggling to get kiddy in pram up it cos of the ice etc-so Mr Bean to the rescue! I remembered we had a log night night before and the ash pan(as in fire ashes-not meat n two veg)was full-so I scattered a huge amount of ash all over the icy slope-to my 'orror I had completely overlooked the fact that I had also been burning lots of d-i-y bits of wood etc(there is an end to this)which in turn were full of nails and screws! I spent half an hour picking all the nails/screws out of the ash,just in time before her hubby came down in his new car-otherwise..pop!..pop!..pop!..pop! not including the spare wheel-thats in the boot-I say this because you are a pedestrian and might not know..tee hee..do I get the clowns crown for my Mr Beanings? wot a plonker! you can go back to your lemsip now-tattybye! Mr St****(the last letter is 'd' ha!-xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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'Evening Lynn-hope your poor feet are improving.as for all your comments-you certainly do me kind service thank you so so much! re the 'baggage' poem-the stanza you referred to was the girls preparedness to share memories of when she-was-in love with the guy she,s leaving,hence the 'half each-but if you want to bung in your idea,please feel very free-no problemos at all-always willing to oblige-thank you very very much-let me know how you are coping-especially in this slippy walking weather-hey! and keep Mr copper coat warm!(which no doubt you do)cheers Lynn-lotsa love-Stefan-xx-B-xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

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HaHa - I can't even blame the wacky backy - that ran out quite a while ago :(
(bigfoot)

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I have a lot of respect for everyone who tackles these ghazals - but I must admit to not overly liking the form. For me emotions are best explored without constraints - the echoing of certain words and tight structure makes it artificial in some way - reduces the scope for interesting imagery, also. Just my opinion :) x

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Thanks for your thoughful comments on 'Lost'. The irony of it being lost is not lost on me. :)

It was a callow effort from some years ago...long before I joined WOL. I dug it out because I admired some other Ghazals that were being posted...far better than mine.

Being lost can be fun, frightening and...bliss.

Jx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

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Thx for the comment on the memory poem Greg, and thx for the welcome back.

My best

Chris

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

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Appreciated the feedback on the Memory poem Isobel...thx

Chris

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Thx for the comments on the Memory poem- appreciated.

Chris

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Thx for the feedback on the Fleeting Memory poem- appreciated.

Chris

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

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Cynthia
Thanks for your comments on Tale from the North Country. I can enjoy free verse, but for me the essence of poetry is rhythm. I find the management of syllabic stress the real challenge of writing verse.
I think this sort of advice on keeping warm ought to be made available on the BBC for pensioners through Public Service Announcements.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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hi Laris :)
thanks for your lovely comment on my song lyrics,
peace and love to you
Rachael x

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Hi Cynthia, thanks for your comments on Snow on the Pass. I've put some background to it on the poem's blog. You were exactly right to think that "bereavement without a funeral" meant "no closure". The "no music" line was just about an inability to listen to any kind of music in case it brought back painful memories. I found the idea of having to shut music out of your life really shocking. Greg

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Mornin! this early-ish bird has woken up to find his worm has frozen! hope you aint been icicled too,best thing to do is sew up the 'oles in yer string vest-if yer dont hear from me in six months,please come to the ashes scattering ceremony-in your back garden-your freezingly-Mr Nastycoff-xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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A brilliant win, Rachel.
Hey, you were very kind to old fellah me at The Atrium.
Where can I access the two poems you performed?

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Hi, dear Isobel! Thank you so much for your support. I mean Alain English's "I Like Strong Women But I Can't Stand Bitches video.lol With warmest wishes and hugs, Larisa

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Hi Freda-your time taken over reading'Honour or illusion'is much appreciated-as to the poem itself,I would think fair for it to be down to any interpretation as with many others? thank you very much-Stefan.

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evenin sparky the flitter'er-ta for loan of fairychops-took her from you to save her teeth! she,s told me so much about you-my god!tut tut! re title-twas an 'Honour to have her in my presence..or was it an illusion..zz..as for you being an illusion-what about the d-s and i missing off the front of that word-(ONLY JOKING)was going to title it'privilege or fantasy'-you notice I sent the 'cloud horses' to the Witches knackers yard? thanks Anniekins-Wildey the wizard-xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Too right Cynthia. I have never gone in for pills, but the mess around me threatens to swallow me up. It had some sort of rhyme and reason to it before Mum died, but then I moved all her nostalgic junk in here, just in case she came back for it, maybe, or in the slim hope that the next generation will be interested, and I am overwhelmed by it. There are two boxes of photographs tabulating the last century for example. I should be turning them all into poems, but I am also working at improving my drawing, selling the Moon calendar and involved with two voluntary organisations, one as Chair, so I am now having to get my head round redundancy legislation. This government are the pitts, so poetry slips into the background, much as it is my first love.

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Sun 28th Nov 2010 16:46Hi Cynthia - thank you for the suggestion I will try and re work it as you suggest even if a format doesn't spring easily to mind - much obliged

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Hi Cynthia,
Thankyou for your comments on 'throwing out the sun'
your interpretation was spot on :)
kind regards
Rachael. x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Thanks for your lovely comment on my poem 'Charibdes Effect.'
Very much appreciated ;-)

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

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Hi Laura, i haven't attempted a ghazal yet and doubt i will for some time to come. Got stacks of paperwork for college and what i'm writing at moment is just a brain clearing thing which is why they are mostly short poems.
Small brain equals little poems, ha ha.
Good to hear from you.x

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Hi, just wanted to say, i did sense your 'snow on the pass' has a personal element and story to it.
I chose to comment on what it meant for me as opposed to the sentiments within it because i wasn't sure how recent your friends demise is/was :-)
I really enjoyed the story too and your sensitive write.x

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

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Thanks for your comment on Snow on the Pass, John. It's good to see you back here again.

Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)

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HI Alison. Thanks for your comments on Snow on the Pass. Well done for spotting that line: it was a late addition and does jut out a little. It may be in the wrong place. Greg

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Hi John. Thanks for your much-valued comment on Snow on the Pass. Greg

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