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Whatever Happened To Me And You?

Gone are the days I cheered you up.

Gone are the days we lifted the Cup.

The days of cuddles they're gone too.

Whatever happened to me and you?

Dark skies where the sun once shone.

A smile to die for has long since gone.

Cold nights alone, restless is my sleep.

Unwanted dreams that cut me deep.

Will the sky above ever again be blue?

Whatever happened to me and you?

◄ Sefton Park

For Rachel ►

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kimberly

Wed 12th Feb 2020 15:29

Mike, I agree 100% with your statement to write only as many lines that deem necessary, be it a short or long poem.

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Mike Bartram

Wed 12th Feb 2020 15:01

Thanks for reading and the nice comments and likes. As with all my stuff, I try and get the message, meaning or my thoughts across in as many lines as it takes. In emotional poems in particular I personally don't see the reason to write more than is necessary. I have done some sci fi epic poems they are 20 verses, I love the challenge both short and long poems offer!

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Don Matthews

Tue 11th Feb 2020 22:03

I like the way you have treated this sad but common end in many relationships Mike.

It's succint, short and simple. The rhyming I like. The last two lines in particular are a good ending:

'Will the sky above ever again be blue?
Whatever happened to me and you?'

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