Think the improper thoughts
think them through
to their quivering conclusion
to nakedness and molten skin
shimmering under warm moonlight
Think those improper thoughts
about friend's lovers
about co-workers, old flames
about strangers
but please
think them about me sometimes
Thinking improper thoughts
to fill boring afternoon meetings
and lonely mornings driving
scarce moments of serenity
always I...
think them about you
(2009)
Very interesting. Lovely inclusive lines. Do I feel three people talking here? The omniscient narrator sets the scene generally; another person speaks in stanza 2; and finally, the poet, who responds in stanza 3? Would love to know.
BTW I'm presuming 'improper' is used only because the person being thought about is an Old Flame, and not a current girl/boyfriend, or even wife/husband?
Lovely! - though I'm with Ray in that thinking beautiful or loving or sexy thoughts about someone is not improper. But the poem is great.
Cx
Yes, I like this. Sweet, actually, rather than improper. It feels like the last line is rhyming with summat, but it isn't, unless you go right back to the second line.
I like this one cos it touches on something so totally human and taboo. We all have that 'you' that we like to think about now and again LOL
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Dave Bradley
Wed 31st Mar 2010 21:00
A gentle and unusual take on something that actually has huge potential to disrupt lives, and that is yet common to us all. I do like your stuff Thomas