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The Cutter

A ripple of air gently cut by his slow moving hand,

The pin sharp slicing of the hubbub by the ringing of a chime,

The cut of a suit made specifically for the man,

As sharp eyes take note of the second hand slicing time,

All angular, all blades when there are no blades present,

Yet the deep cuts exacted by the keen edge of an incisive mind,

Leave others slashed hard in a way they resent,

As the brightest person in the room is sharply defined,

And a tongue like a razor wielded by a demon barber,

Is more like a scalpel in the surgeons hand,

As it slices through clouded thoughts each other present may harbour,

And cuts to the truth so that all may understand.

◄ Lead Me Not

An Ideal World ►

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 15th Sep 2019 13:45

And thank you Keith for commenting and to everyoneone else that liked.

J. x

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keith jeffries

Sun 15th Sep 2019 09:36

Jason,

A clever poem which leaves the reader free to intrepret. I enjoyed this
Thank you
Keith

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 15th Sep 2019 06:34

Ah yes Jon, I do love to watch a good, "Hitch' slapping," as it was known. Now that was a sharp incisive mind if ever I saw one.

J. x

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Jon Stainsby

Fri 13th Sep 2019 07:59

Great, Jason. Makes me think of the debates I have been watching recently involving Christopher Hitchens, amongst others.

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Jason Bayliss

Thu 12th Sep 2019 22:03

Thanks to Desmond and Vautaw for liking.

J. x

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Jason Bayliss

Wed 11th Sep 2019 19:00

Thanks Ruth, I wanted it to show sharpness, glad that came across.

Mirror, Mirror. Written on Feb 20th.

Thanks,

J. x

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Ruth O'Reilly

Wed 11th Sep 2019 17:43

I liked your observation of the 'sharpness' of life in all it's forms. Which month did you write Your Mirror piece? I can't find it

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Jason Bayliss

Wed 11th Sep 2019 16:31

Thanks to Avishek, Mae, Lisa, Devon, Julia, Ruth and Chrystel for liking.

J. x

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 10th Sep 2019 16:26

Thanks Rose, I read once that the first thing the most dangerous person in the room does is looks for the most dangerous person in the room, and it seemed true of intelligence as well.
After that, I honestly didn't know where I was going with it but it seemed to develop into a meeting or forum of some kind, so I do get where you're coming from, and there is an element of someone really sharp and incisive orchestrating the whole thing.

J. x

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Tue 10th Sep 2019 13:26

comes over brilliantly as a cross between an AA meeting or any other kind of counselling session, the self-made victims being made to face up to the damage they have done to themselves etc

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fab use of metaphors Jason.







Rose ?

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