Lead Me Not

Oh pernicious fool, speak not unto me,

Blacken not my heart with thy vitriol,

Still thy bitter tongue, still eternally,

The whispered words of thy venomous soul.

 

Lay thy sorry wit, softly on the ground,

Let the daggers of thy feeble mouth rest,

For the worst I could offer in return,

Would still be better than thy very best.

 

Slip not behind me on this darkest night,

No fell shadow do I need or desire,

Thy presence is but an absence of light,

A phantom cast by the flickering fire.

 

Rest sorry serpent, take thy temptations,

Slander not my ear with thy wickedness,

Thy dripping fangs prick not my frustrations,

Nor malevolence cause in me distress.

 

Serpent of the pit with thy coiling words,

Let not thy foul presence be accepted,

Each utterance, each hollow promise heard,

Is recognised as lie and rejected.

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jennifer Malden

Tue 1st Oct 2019 20:05

Wow!!!!!!!!! Really impressive

Jennifer

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Jason Bayliss

Thu 19th Sep 2019 19:53

Well Tui Dragonfly, rarely have I read a response that has made me smile so much, I'm glad you banished the serpent and rode your dragon to happiness.
The dragon of chaos,or the dragon of order, which holds sway today?
Or do stay on the line at the border, and try to please each in my way?

J. x

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Tui Dragonfly

Thu 19th Sep 2019 17:33

Wow and Yay!

Thank you Mr Jabberwoke

I Love cyncronicity...

This is EXACTLY how i was feeling on Mon/Tues this week as I caught myself sliding, wet cheeks to the wind, with great speed into the siren-istic whirlpool of the '50's club' self-pity party.

My 'DragonFlyDark' was at top speed,
her wings spread out full
rarely given the chance to fly,
and rarely to ever so Low!

But I caught her sharp, up on the edge,
and pulled upon her reins...
"Woah there my great black beauty"
today is not your day.

My faithful dragon
yearns to please
I've got to watch her food,
whichever emotion she devours
becomes her driving mood.

So to the sun, we did turn
our faces, one by one.
Together we took a mighty breath
began to have some FUN.

Up into the mind we'll fly
in search of others of our kind,
and low and behold, within WriteOutLoud,
the Jabberwoke lurks.

Another dragon to respect is here,
who plays with, and shares the 'Light'.
Beware the solicious darkness he says,
in an inspirational invitation to Write!!

An inspiration to my heart
A message to myself

"Choose which dragon you fly each day,
and lovingly prepare her food.
Fill her full of love and joy
and stop being a bloody fool!"

'DragonFlyLight' is her true name
she sings, and writes and more,
"Embrace the serpent inside yourself,
for it is their strength
that will open new doors."

Cheers Jason
I look forward to reading more!!


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Jason Bayliss

Mon 9th Sep 2019 22:11

Thanks Avishek for liking.
Thanks Devon, I do love the old fire and brimstone classical style and it's nice to play around with it.
Thanks Mae, high praise indeed my friend, like I said to Devon, it all went a bit fire, brimstone and get thee behind me, so I'm really pleased you like it as I always look out for your comments, normal service resumes tomorrow.?

J. x

Devon Brock

Mon 9th Sep 2019 21:22

Jason,

Shmacking good stuff. Iambic pentameter always supports big verse and solid rhyme. Well done. The poem is reflective of a style that was thrown off by the modernists and post-modernists. This is a wonderful revival.

D

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Mae Foreman

Mon 9th Sep 2019 20:57

Wow, my friend! A lot of dexterity and eloquence went into that piece. I believe that every writer dreams of writing something like that! Beautiful poetry and in impeccable iambic pentameter! Excellent piece Jason! You have always been an excellent poet but with this one you have taken it to whole new levels of brilliance! Begone demon, whoever yours is! I'm only a bit bummed that I didn't get to see the evolution of it, you mentioned editing, I got to the piece when it was perfected! Whatever it was you did , it worked! Kudos?
Mae

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Jason Bayliss

Mon 9th Sep 2019 17:47

Sorry to those that already liked, had to do a bit of an edit, it didn't sound quite right.

J. x

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Jason Bayliss

Mon 9th Sep 2019 14:22

Thanks for liking Brian and Rose, I enjoyed writing this one, pleased you like it.

J. x

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Jason Bayliss

Mon 9th Sep 2019 11:30

Thanks Ruth, I've been trying to write something in iambic for a while and then this just came to me this morning. So glad you liked it.

And thank you Devon for liking.

J. x

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Ruth O'Reilly

Mon 9th Sep 2019 11:10

This sounds very powerful Jason, You are akin to a poetic exorcist shunning demons of the soul. I can imagine this being performed on stage.

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