Lead Me Not

Oh pernicious fool, speak not unto me,

Blacken not my heart with thy vitriol,

Still thy bitter tongue, still eternally,

The whispered words of thy venomous soul.

 

Lay thy sorry wit, softly on the ground,

Let the daggers of thy feeble mouth rest,

For the worst I could offer in return,

Would still be better than thy very best.

 

Slip not behind me on this darkest night,

No fell shadow do I need or desire,

Thy presence is but an absence of light,

A phantom cast by the flickering fire.

 

Rest sorry serpent, take thy temptations,

Slander not my ear with thy wickedness,

Thy dripping fangs prick not my frustrations,

Nor malevolence cause in me distress.

 

Serpent of the pit with thy coiling words,

Let not thy foul presence be accepted,

Each utterance, each hollow promise heard,

Is recognised as lie and rejected.

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Jason Bayliss

Mon 9th Sep 2019 22:11

Thanks Avishek for liking.
Thanks Devon, I do love the old fire and brimstone classical style and it's nice to play around with it.
Thanks Mae, high praise indeed my friend, like I said to Devon, it all went a bit fire, brimstone and get thee behind me, so I'm really pleased you like it as I always look out for your comments, normal service resumes tomorrow.😁

J. x

Devon Brock

Mon 9th Sep 2019 21:22

Jason,

Shmacking good stuff. Iambic pentameter always supports big verse and solid rhyme. Well done. The poem is reflective of a style that was thrown off by the modernists and post-modernists. This is a wonderful revival.

D

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Mae Foreman

Mon 9th Sep 2019 20:57

Wow, my friend! A lot of dexterity and eloquence went into that piece. I believe that every writer dreams of writing something like that! Beautiful poetry and in impeccable iambic pentameter! Excellent piece Jason! You have always been an excellent poet but with this one you have taken it to whole new levels of brilliance! Begone demon, whoever yours is! I'm only a bit bummed that I didn't get to see the evolution of it, you mentioned editing, I got to the piece when it was perfected! Whatever it was you did , it worked! Kudos🎈
Mae

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Jason Bayliss

Mon 9th Sep 2019 17:47

Sorry to those that already liked, had to do a bit of an edit, it didn't sound quite right.

J. x

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Jason Bayliss

Mon 9th Sep 2019 14:22

Thanks for liking Brian and Rose, I enjoyed writing this one, pleased you like it.

J. x

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Jason Bayliss

Mon 9th Sep 2019 11:30

Thanks Ruth, I've been trying to write something in iambic for a while and then this just came to me this morning. So glad you liked it.

And thank you Devon for liking.

J. x

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Ruth O'Reilly

Mon 9th Sep 2019 11:10

This sounds very powerful Jason, You are akin to a poetic exorcist shunning demons of the soul. I can imagine this being performed on stage.

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