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Weeping Willow

Beneath the willow tree
she cried,
A lost and broken soul.
The wind blew hard and
scored her bones
but still she didn't go.

Her love now lay below
the ground,
eternally interred.
No other folks
accompanied her,
she's the only one that cared.

Her tears fell fast upon
his grave
and washed away the dirt.
His name now clear
upon that stone
only made her hurt.

She took the knife,
it's tip, it gleamed
and thrust it into her.
Beneath the willow tree
she died,
and still nobody cared.

 

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clarissa mckone

Wed 24th Mar 2010 00:04

nice poem

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Andy N

Mon 22nd Mar 2010 08:21

made me think of the end off romeo and juliet, except where juliet kills herself instead off romeo... very sad stuff but i enjoyed the content...

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Lisa Milligan

Sun 21st Mar 2010 21:06

This is tragically beautiful. I, too, love the weeping willow and find it a large part of the piece's beauty.

You did such a great job with each verse. It is very tightly written and there isn't a weak spot in any of it. I especially love the first verse.

Strong, well written and heartbreaking. Nicely done.

xxLisa

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Sun 21st Mar 2010 12:46

The rhyming schemes in some of your work can sometimes make the poem seem just a little bit at odds with the subject matter.
This one for me, as Francine says is tragic at the end and the message is very strong and there's something about it which resonates with me.
I love it because of the willow tree which sways in my visual scene in it.
It's a bit like the gruesome death one you wrote where generally, people wouldn't associate as being poetic and yet there is absolutely nothing offensive in your use of words.
I find your poetry very intriguing. Keep 'em coming and go with the flow. I'm loving it.
Janet.x

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Francine

Sat 20th Mar 2010 21:02

I love Weeping Willows...

This is very sad, and I was not expecting such a tragic ending.

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