Your shoelace is undone, she said

which threw me quite off balance,

for such considerations run

outside my sphere of talents.


Such observations that ladies tell

will bring us down to earth

from higher realms wherein we dwell,

challenging our worth.


A shoe is just a metaphor

when in that state the ladies find us,

to rescue us from siren's muse

and use their wiles to bind us.




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Wed 24th Jul 2019 18:07

Hi Jennifer.. hope you're well. I love it when you come after the dust settles, lift the corner of the poem and squidge a nice comment in. Aquarius people like me live on an elevated level haha. Marriage comes with a set of scales that need a balance. Thanks again!


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jennifer Malden

Wed 24th Jul 2019 10:52

Liked this one yet again Ray! Do you males really dwell in higher realms?!!!!!


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Sat 20th Jul 2019 20:15

Thanks Brian and Don. At last my genius has been confirmed my the most stringent of readers . There are of course different types of love, and this isn't one of them..... nice thought though.

Mark, more thoughts indeed to chew over!

Trevor, I'm glad you enjoyed this. I thought of that first line and went from there, a fun ride .

Thanks Jon, Lisa and Heart of Lead for your likes, appreciated.


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trevor homer

Sat 20th Jul 2019 13:26

Great opening that leads into an intriguing poem - Thanks Ray, excellebt

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Don Matthews

Fri 19th Jul 2019 08:49

I'm joined by fellow rhymer
Your influence is catching
A latent rhymic bug in you
Ray, appears it's hatching....

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 19th Jul 2019 01:13

Females often feel the need
To cut us to the quick;
Revenge for Eve caught apple scrumping?
Handmaidens of old Nick!

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Don Matthews

Fri 19th Jul 2019 00:03

This is very clever Ray
The shoelace that off-balanced you
I did not get to see.......


(I was out meeting friends)

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Thu 18th Jul 2019 23:58

When I say love Ray I wouldn't want you to think this means something deeper than it should. I mean it in an esoteric sense...a word I don't understand the meaning of but will look it up shortly.

I've been out tonight and met a few friends...Stella, Miguel and John Smith.

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Thu 18th Jul 2019 23:46

Bloody love it Ray, and BTW I love you too.

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