To Fellow Poets
if my mind worked
like your mind
where is the joy in that
because your ideas
broaden my ideas
you thrill me
perhaps I would not say it
exactly so
but enough so
to understand your thrust and pull
to glory in your view of things
all things
I find
the halo of humanity
is receptivity
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Cynthia, I think the third line should be "where would be the joy in that" just a tense change.
I liked the pared down delivery. Less is more, makes us all work harder.
<Deleted User> (6470)
Wed 27th Jan 2010 23:28
Nice one Cynthia, I completely agree with this!
You have expressed the sentiments of many Cynthia...
I especially like the first verse:
'if my mind worked
like your mind
where is the joy in that'
John - you never cease to make me laugh, belly laugh in fact...A lovely poem Cynthia - and I would agree very much with Greg's comment. I think reading the work of others has helped me enormously in writing my own. It is also fascinating to see the world through the eyes of others - even if they do see things very differently. Your poem sums it up beautifully without being obsequious.
Well, ignoring the obvious sexual sub text, you are right! :)
Spare, clear and completely...errr, complete!
Wise.
Goodstuff.
: )
jx
The mood and content of this poem reflects the spirit of WOL at its best, and your own generosity in the way you comment on other people's work, Cynthia.
Lovely last verse! I echo all your thoughts here Cynthia. xxx
I like this ;)
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Jon
Thu 4th Feb 2010 17:27
Hi Cynthia,
Loved this poem's message,especially the first line,
"If my mind worked like your mind,where is the joy in that?".
Well observed sentiments!