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8:04

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You caught my eye on the 8:04

Admiring you is not against the law

It felt so good now I want more

A twinkle in your eyes I surely saw

You sat opposite me without a care

Fingers running through your hair

You gazed at me with a secret smile

I kept my composure all the while

My heart was beating like a drum

Butterflies in my stomach flying

Light headed and knees going weak

I can’t fight it there’s no use trying

Tomorrow I’ll be back on the train

Hoping that I will see you once again

Walking elegantly through the door

You caught my eye on the 8:04

◄ October 10 - World Mental Health Day

Autumn Absolutely ►

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Tom Doolan

Thu 11th Oct 2018 16:53

Thanks Jane - It was definitely a stimulating and creative experience for me. T ?

Hi M C. - It doesn't happen often. But when it does it is very emotive & exciting. T ?

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 11th Oct 2018 14:37

Surely most of us have experienced the feeling! I know I have - and this entertaining take in rhyme brought it back!
Nice one.

<Deleted User> (19836)

Thu 11th Oct 2018 10:12

I love this! ?? Written with great rhythm and rhyme!

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